Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates, about the information of different injuries due to gun and knife crime from 1998 to 2007 and the proportion increases for each degree of injury with the passage of time. The types of injuries are fatal, serious and slihght injuries, these injuries are very dangerous for human life.

Overall, firstly we talk to about the fatal and serious injuries than we talk about the slight and total injuries. The slight injury is more common than other injuries, other injuries are also increased with the passage of time. When the peoples are affected these types of injuries they need a much mopre medicated.

In the year of [redacted phone], the fatal injuries are affected 49 persons while the serious injuries are 162 persons. In 1999 to 2003 the fatal injuries are gradually increased from 62 to 80 while the serious injuries are quickly increased and reached from 200 to 416, the serious injuries are more common than fatal injuries. However, in the year of [redacted phone] fatal injuries were again declined difference of 10 while the serious injuries are increased to 437.In the year of 2004 to 2006, the fatal injuries are decreased from 77 to 58 and there is no any other injuries instead of fatal injuries in 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the topic and includes some relevant figures for fatal and serious injuries, such as the rise in serious cases from 162 to 476 across the reported years. However, it only minimally summarises the table: the slight-injury and total figures, which account for the largest changes, are not described at all. The overview is also unclear and includes irrelevant commentary about how dangerous the injuries are and the medical care people need. There is a factual error in saying that there were no other injuries in 2007; the table shows dashes for serious, slight and total figures, so these values are unavailable, not zero. Focus on the main trends and percentage increases, and distinguish missing data from a reported absence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has paragraph breaks and a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, and then details about fatal and serious injuries. Time markers such as “In 1999 to 2003” and “However” help signal progression. Nevertheless, the organisation is difficult to follow because the overview says the writer will discuss fatal and serious injuries before slight and total injuries, but the latter are never covered. The final paragraph also moves through several years in a long, crowded sequence, with little separation between points. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive. Group the data into clear comparisons, use one paragraph for the overview and separate paragraphs for the main trends, and ensure each announced topic is actually developed.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the subject and injury categories, and terms such as “fatal,” “serious,” “gradually increased” and “declined” are relevant to describing data. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “the proportion increases” does not accurately describe the table’s percentage increases, while “the fatal injuries are affected 49 persons” is an awkward way to report a count. “Sli hght” is misspelled, and “much mopre medicated” is both misspelled and unsuitable for this task. Use precise reporting language such as “the number of cases,” “rose to,” and “accounted for,” and avoid comments unrelated to the figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons across several years, and the main subject is generally recognisable. However, control is inconsistent: errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles and agreement occur repeatedly. Examples include “The table illustrates, about the information,” “the fatal injuries are affected 49 persons,” and “the serious injuries are quickly increased.” The sentence beginning “Overall, firstly we talk to about…” is also grammatically awkward and does not form a clear overview. Punctuation contributes to readability problems, particularly where “437.In the year” has no space after the full stop. Practise accurate patterns such as “There were 49 fatal injuries” and “Serious injuries rose from 162 to 476,” then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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