Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This table highlightes the injury level caused by knife and gun crime over the years going from 1998 to 2007 in the Great Britain. It also shows the percentage increase in crime from 98/99 to 05/07.

Starting from fatal injuries, the numbers kept rising from 1988 all the way toward 2002 where the starting numbers were 49 in 1999, went upto 62 in 2000, 72 in 2001, 95 in 2002, then in 2002/2003 the number declined from 95 to 80 in 2003 and followed the same decline for another year going to 68 in 2004, then in 2005 number again increased to 77 then it shows a gradually decline in 2006 upto 45 then in 2007 the final number of fatal injuries were 58 marking a percentage increase of 18% over the course of time from [redacted phone].

Moving onto serious injuries, the number kept increasing from 1998 all the way to 2004 then shows a slight decline in 2005 then again increase in 2006 and no data is shown for 06/07, in 1998/99 number was 162 then in 99/2000 it was 200 then in 00/01 it was 244 in 01/02 it went upto 392 then in 02/03 it was 416 in 03/04 it was 437 then in 04/05 it dropped upto 411 but in 05/06 it again went upto 476 with percentage increase of about 194 percent from 98/99-06/07

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the table’s subject and reports several figures for fatal and serious injuries, including the rise in serious cases to 476 and the overall increase shown in the table. However, it does not provide an overview of the main patterns, and it omits the slight-injury figures, which form the largest category and show the most dramatic change, as well as the total figures. Some details are inaccurate: the period begins in 1998, not 1988; fatal injuries fell to 49 in 2005–06, not 45; and the percentage increase applies through 2005–06 for serious injuries, not 2006–07. The account therefore covers the task only partially. Add a concise overview and select the most significant trends across all categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from fatal to serious injuries, and phrases such as “Starting from” and “Moving onto” help signal the change of topic. The separate paragraphs also make the two categories distinguishable. However, there is no opening overview or concluding synthesis, so the reader does not get a clear overall progression through the table. Within each paragraph, long chains of figures are joined with repeated “then” and “and,” making comparisons difficult to follow. For example, the fatal-injury paragraph moves through many years in one sentence. Use shorter sentences, group figures into clear phases, and use comparisons such as “by contrast” or “after peaking” to make relationships explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the broad subject and some trends, with terms such as “fatal injuries,” “serious injuries,” “declined,” and “percentage increase” relevant to the task. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive. “The numbers kept rising” and “shows a slight decline” are used in a largely list-like account, while “starting numbers” is unclear in this context. There are also spelling and form errors, including “highlightes” and “upto,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise reporting language, such as “the figure rose steadily,” “reached a peak,” and “fell to,” and use “proportion” or “rate” only when the data actually represents one.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex sentences and uses past-tense reporting, but control is inconsistent. Several sentences run on through multiple clauses, especially the fatal-injury account, with punctuation that does not clearly separate the stages. There are also errors in articles and sentence structure, as in “in the Great Britain,” and agreement in “the final number … were 58.” The opening phrase “This table highlightes” also has an incorrect verb form. These problems sometimes make the sequence of figures harder to interpret, although the main meaning is generally recoverable. Improve accuracy by using shorter sentences with one main comparison each, checking subject–verb agreement, and consistently using past tense for the historical data.

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