Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the table says that the crime statistics of great britain happened form 1998 to 2007 it shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries caused by gun and knife

From the year 1998 to 1999 the fatal, serious and slight injuries recorded at 864 of total i this the slight injuries are high in number with 653 with in a 4 year of time the crime has incresed in double the number in [redacted phone] the total number of incident happend are 1877 in the same year higest fatal are recorded with 95 deaths.

After 2002 the number of deaths are declines year by year by end of 2007 the fatal drops to 58, and the serious and slight crime rate growing high it almost incresed in 5 times with total number of crime are in year [redacted phone] is 3821. here the from 2006 to 2007 serious and slight injurys are not mentioned in oaver increase in persantage 98/99-2005/06 is in fatal 18, serious injuries 194, slight 405 and in total 342

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the subject and report several relevant figures, including the starting total of 864, the peak fatal figure of 95 in 2001–02, and the final fatal count of 58. You also note that serious and slight injury figures are absent for 2006–07 and include the percentage increases. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main trends, and some descriptions are inaccurate or unclear: fatal injuries do not decline year by year after 2002, since they rise from 68 to 77 in 2004–05, and the claim that crime “almost increased in 5 times” is not clearly tied to a category or comparison. Select the key overall patterns and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the first year to the middle period and then to the later figures. This gives the reader some sense of chronology, and phrases such as “After 2002” and “by end of 2007” attempt to connect stages. However, ideas are not arranged into clear, purposeful paragraphs, and several sentences combine multiple points without clear relationships. For example, the sentence beginning “After 2002” moves from fatal injuries to serious and slight injuries, then to the total and percentage increases. The final clause is especially difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and grouped details, using clear links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “total,” and “percentage increase,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “crime rate growing high,” “fatal drops,” and “in a 4 year of time.” Repetition of “number” and “crime” also limits precision, while spelling errors such as “incresed,” “happend,” and “injurys” make the writing less controlled. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing figures and trends, and check spelling and word forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent enough to make parts difficult to understand. For instance, “the fatal, serious and slight injuries recorded at 864 of total” lacks a clear verb, while “the total number of incident happend are 1877” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Tense and article use are also inconsistent, as in “the crime statistics … happened form 1998 to 2007.” Punctuation is often missing, creating run-on sentences. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine related information with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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