Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table give us information the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the value increase for each degree of injury over the time.

First off all in 1998 to1999 the fetal ratio is 49, where the serious case is 162 and slight number is 653 . the fatal is peack in the 2001 to 2002 . Which value is 95. Then they are fall down

But serious case are go upward, where ratio change, they are not be cotrol and the peack rate is 476 in 2005 to 2006.But slight injuries are unbeliveable change in 2000, the ratio is just 933, but in 2006 the number of slight injury cross 3296.

Over all the the fatel crime is in the control by the Great Britain, But if we look the numbers of serious injury and slight injireis the are so high in every year. So hance proof that the Great Britain is faild.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the subject and report several relevant figures, including the fatal-injury peak of 95 in 2001–02 and the serious-injury peak of 476 in 2005–06. However, the response is incomplete and the overview is unclear: saying fatal crime was “in the control” is not a reliable summary, and the conclusion that Britain “is failed” is an unsupported judgement rather than a description of the data. Some details are inaccurate or imprecise: slight injuries reached 3,424 in 2004–05 before falling to 3,296, not simply crossing 3,296 in 2006. The response also contains 137 words, below the required 150. Add a concise overview and compare the overall rise and the final-year data limits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, trend paragraphs and a conclusion, and sequencing phrases such as “First of all” and “But” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the discussion jumps between categories and years, and several sentences are incomplete or loosely connected, such as “Then they are fall down.” The final judgement does not follow logically from the figures. Use one paragraph for the overview and separate paragraphs for the main trends, grouping related comparisons. Make links explicit—for example, explain that fatal injuries fluctuated, while serious injuries generally rose—and use clear references to avoid ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “ratio,” and “peak,” so the reader can recognise the categories being discussed. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning unclear: “fatal ratio,” “not be control,” “unbelievable change,” and “Britain is failed.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “fetal,” “peack,” “cotrol,” “unbeliveable,” and “injireis,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise, neutral language suited to describing data, such as “number of cases,” “reached a peak,” “declined,” and “increased substantially.” Avoid evaluative claims about a country’s success or failure unless the task provides evidence for them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few different sentence forms, including contrast with “But” and a relative clause in “Which value is 95,” but control is limited and errors frequently affect readability. Examples include “The table give us information,” “the serious case are go upward,” and “the fatal is peack,” where agreement and verb forms are faulty. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent: “Then they are fall down” is incomplete, while the opening sentence is awkwardly constructed. Practise accurate simple past forms for the historical data (“rose,” “fell,” “reached”) and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb. Once these are secure, add controlled comparisons using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.”

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