Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart illustrate information about The number of fetal,Seriouse and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentages incease for each degree of injury over period.The chart compares different crimes and presents the data in numbers or percentages.Overall,It can be seen that there are noticeable differents amoung the crimes shown in the chart.Some years in injuries are decreases and some uears while opposite.In addition ,Some fluctuation by following increament as well as decreament where as fpr some cases they remain stable.According to the chart,The first year 1998 to 19999 the fetal 49 and seriouse 162 slights was 653 and total injuries was 864.This is followed by second years 19999 to 2000 in injuries was increases by fetals 62 seriouse 162 slight 933 the total injuries was 1195.Furthermore,2001 to 2002 crimes was increased fetals was 95 serious 392 slight 1390 and the total injuries was 1877.This shows a clear camparison among the crimes.Let's have a look at the remaining informatin,It is evident that the crime in 2007 fetals was 58 and no serioius no slight it was the decreases the crimes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the topic and includes a few figures, such as 49 fatal injuries, 653 slight injuries and a total of 864 in 1998–99. However, it only minimally summarises the table: the overview is vague (“noticeable differents” and “some fluctuation”) and does not identify the main pattern that slight injuries and the total rose substantially before reaching their highest levels in 2004–05. There are also factual errors: serious injuries in 1999–2000 were 200, not 162, and the dashes for 2006–07 mean those figures are unavailable, not that there were no serious or slight injuries. The response gives little coverage of the period and does not accurately report the percentage increases. Select key trends and compare them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move from an introduction and overview to details, using phrases such as “According to the chart” and “Furthermore.” However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the overview is too general, the body jumps between selected years, and the final reference to 2007 is not clearly connected to the earlier figures. Several linking expressions are awkward or do not show a meaningful relationship, including “This shows a clear comparison” and “Let’s have a look at the remaining information.” Paragraphing is also absent, making the response difficult to scan. Organise the report into a brief introduction, a specific overview, and one or two body paragraphs grouped by trends; use linking words only where they clarify comparisons or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total injuries,” and “increased,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-form errors strain the reader: examples include “fetal,” “Seriouse,” “differents,” “incease,” and “decreament.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “different crimes” when the table compares injury severity, and “the crime in 2007” for the injury figures. Build a more accurate range for describing data, such as “injuries,” “figures,” “rose,” “fell,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid using a word like “crime” when you mean the number of injuries.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and sequencing, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “the first year 1998 to 19999 the fetal 49 and seriouse 162 slights was 653” lacks a clear sentence structure and has problems with articles, agreement and punctuation. In “the total injuries was 864,” the subject and verb do not agree; “in injuries was increases” also has an incorrect verb form. Capitalisation and spacing after punctuation are inconsistent, and many clauses are joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “In 1998–99, there were 49 fatal injuries and 653 slight injuries.” Then check tense, agreement and punctuation in each sentence.

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