Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table below illustrate the number of the people who are injurious by gun and knife crime in Great britain between 1998 and 2007 where finding how many are fatal, serious and slight condition and the percentage rise up from each degree of injury over the period.

Overall, There are four conditon of injured . There are significantly climb injured percentage.

According to the table , In 1998 to 1999 there was 49 people was fatal 162 are serious condition and 653 are slight . The total are 864 while in 1999 to 2000 there was 62 fatal , 200 was serious and 933 was slight. The total are 1195. In 2000 to 2001 there are 72 fatal , 244 was serious , 1066 was slight and the total are 1382.

Morever , in 2001 to 2002 the total are 1877 however , In 2002 to 2003 the total are 2179

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the table’s subject and reports several figures accurately, including the 1998–99 and 1999–2000 injury totals and the totals for 2000–01, 2001–02 and 2002–03. However, it gives only a partial account of the data and does not provide a clear overview of the main trends. The statement that there are “four conditon of injured” is unclear, and “significantly climb injured percentage” does not explain the key pattern: slight injuries and the overall total rose markedly, while fatal injuries fluctuated. The response stops after mentioning two later totals, omitting the remaining years and the percentage increases. To improve, summarise the overall trends first, then select a few comparisons that show how the categories changed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: an opening, a brief overview attempt, and then figures presented in chronological order. This gives the reader some sense of the table’s progression. However, the response is not developed into clear, well-organised paragraphs, and the final section ends abruptly after the 2002–03 total. Linking words such as “According to the table” and “Moreover” are used, but “however” does not express a clear contrast in “the total are 1877 however, in 2002 to 2003 the total are 2179.” The repeated listing of figures also makes the progression difficult to follow. Group the overview separately, then organise the details into meaningful comparisons, using connectors only where their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total” and “percentage,” so the reader can recognise the subject and categories. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear. For example, “people who are injurious” is not a natural way to describe those injured, while “significantly climb injured percentage” does not clearly communicate a trend. There are also spelling errors such as “Great britain,” “conditon” and “Morever.” Use precise reporting language such as “the number of people injured,” “rose substantially” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and some figures are conveyed in understandable clauses. However, grammatical control is inconsistent: errors in agreement, verb forms and sentence construction occur repeatedly. For instance, “The table below illustrate” needs a singular verb, and “there was 49 people was fatal” combines incompatible structures. “The total are 864” also has incorrect agreement, while the opening sentence is difficult to follow because several clauses are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly around commas and sentence openings. Practise accurate simple reporting sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “There were 49 fatal injuries, and the total was 864.”

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