Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatel, severe and slightly injuries resulting from knife and gun throughout 1998 to 2007 in Great Britain, and also the proportion increase for every degree of injury over the period.

Overall, the number of people who got slightly injured are higher than other two. where as Lowest number of people got killed by gun and knif,. also the people who have serious injury was at the middle. However time period between [redacted phone] accounts for the higest number of injuies by gun and knife.

Initially, the people who died by these act, was as least as 50 in number but as the year passes it number increases maximun to 95 between [redacted phone] but in the end it lasts on the same number as it was in the start which make up total of 18 percent. However, variation was also seen in the number of people who got bruetly injured, as i was only at 162 in [redacted phone] with gradual increase it reaches maximum up to 476 at the end of 2006 ending of total average of 194.

On the otherhand, Alternation was also seen on the record of slightly injured people as it starts from 653 in 1998 and with slighly escalation in each year it reach upto 3296 in the last mention year with total mediun of 405. In total data changes with the passage of time, starting from 864 and ending on 3821 at average was about 342, where mostly people was those who got slighly injured by gun and knife.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that slight injuries were the most numerous and fatal injuries the least, and you include an overview as well as figures for all three categories and the total. Several details, however, are inaccurate or unclear. Fatal injuries peaked at 95 in 2001–02, then fluctuated and ended at 58 in 2006–07; they did not finish at roughly the starting figure of 49. Slight injuries rose to 3,424 in 2004–05 before falling to 3,296, so describing a gradual increase each year misses this important change. The claim that 2004–05 had the highest number of injuries is correct for the total, but the overview could distinguish this from the slight-injury peak. Report the percentage figures as increases, rather than calling them a “total average” or “medium.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the injury categories. This helps the reader follow the broad subject. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and linking expressions are used mechanically or inaccurately. For example, “On the otherhand” introduces another category, but the paragraph then moves from slight injuries to the total without a clear transition. The overview also contains a sentence fragment beginning “where as,” and references such as “it” in “it was only at 162” are not immediately clear. Group the figures more deliberately, use clear time comparisons, and connect the overview to the detailed paragraphs without repeating general statements such as “variation was also seen.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious injury,” “slightly injured,” “gradual increase,” and “maximum,” so the reader can generally identify the categories and trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms, and spellings make the report less precise. “Fatel,” “higest,” “injuies,” and “bruetly” are noticeable errors, while “total average” and “total mediun” do not accurately describe percentage increases. Phrases such as “people who died by these act” and “the last mention year” are also unnatural. Build a reliable set of trend and comparison expressions, and check spelling and collocations so that the figures are described clearly and consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses with “as” and “with,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent: agreement, tense, articles, and sentence boundaries need attention. For example, “the number of people who got slightly injured are higher” should use a singular verb, and “as the year passes it number increases” has problems with both tense and pronoun form. The sentence beginning “Initially, the people who died…” is difficult to follow because its clauses are not joined clearly. Capitalisation and punctuation are also uneven, as in “where as” and “However” after a comma. Practise accurate comparisons and past-tense reporting, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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