Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table enlists the information regarding extent of injuries categorized as fatal, serious and slight from knife and gun crimes and thier respective percentage increase in the England from the duration 1998 to 2007.

Overall, the total number of injuries increased every year. The people suffered from minor bruises were in large number in comparision to fetal and serious ones. Also, the percentage increment is highest for slight injuries, while the lowest for fetal.

The statics of fetal injuries are fluctuating. Although, the numbers of case rose from 49 ([redacted phone]) to 70 ([redacted phone]), but after that there are consuctive increase and decrease. The cases recorded for serious injuries are intermediate, the noted numbers were 162 (1998-99) initially and the reached the 476 ([redacted phone]). The highest numbers of cases are recorded for slight injuries which started with 653 and reached 3296. Despite variations in categorical statics, the sum for overall recorded cases increases.

Luckily, there are no crimes recorded for the [redacted phone] year except the 58 fetal injuries. The percetange incresases are maximum for slight calculated as 405% with total at second (342%) followed by seroius (194%) and fetal (18%) at third and fourth position respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features: slight injuries were the most numerous, fatal injuries the least numerous, and the percentage rise was greatest for slight injuries and smallest for fatal injuries. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear. Fatal cases rose from 49 to 95 in 2001–02, not to 70 in 2002–03, and then fluctuated; serious injuries reached 476 in 2005–06, not 2005–07. The statement that no crimes were recorded in 2006–07 is misleading: the table gives 58 fatal injuries, while the other categories are unavailable, not zero. The overview also says totals increased every year, although they fell from 3,912 to 3,821 in the final year with a total shown. More precise reporting of these trends would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs giving details, so the reader can identify the main topic and some comparisons. However, progression is uneven: the final paragraph moves from the missing 2006–07 figures to percentage increases without a clear transition, and several points repeat the overview, such as the prominence of slight injuries. Linking words such as “Although,” “Despite” and “Also” are attempted, but some do not express the intended relationship clearly. For example, “Although” begins a sentence that does not complete the contrast smoothly. Group the figures by injury category or by overall trend, and use clearer references to distinguish unavailable data from zero values.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “categorized,” “fluctuating,” “intermediate” and “percentage increase,” and the reader can generally understand the subject. However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less clear. “The table enlists” is an unnatural collocation, while “minor bruises” does not accurately describe the table’s category of slight injuries. There are also repeated misspellings, including “thier,” “comparision,” “statics,” “percetange” and “seroius.” Use the table’s labels consistently and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for changes and totals would help you describe the data without relying on vague phrases such as “numbers of cases.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some attempts at more complex structures, such as “Although, the numbers of case rose…” and “Despite variations in categorical statics…”. However, complex sentences are often not controlled successfully, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “the noted numbers were 162 … initially and the reached the 476” has an incomplete or misplaced subject, while “there are no crimes recorded for the 2006-2007 year except the 58” is awkwardly constructed. The opening sentence also has a long, difficult-to-follow structure. Practise forming complete clauses, maintaining consistent past-tense reporting, and checking articles, plurals and punctuation; simpler, accurate sentences would make the comparisons clearer.

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