Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table below illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries held from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.

Overall,the slight injuries displays a significant upword trend in The Great Britain over the year [redacted phone], the number was 3296. Fatal injuries peojected to the most lower percentage among the three sectors and was complitely same from the starting year 1998 and ended in 2006 at around 49 and increasing percentage is 18 only.

In [redacted phone], slight injuries surprisingly peaked with almost doubled than previous year. Serious injuries are also increasing steadiely. Starting from 162 and finished with 476.

Slight injuries increased the most around at 405% seocend is serious injuries also the upword value at 194% and the lowes with 18% is Fatal injuries. The total injuries are peak at roughly 342% massive incriment. whi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and report several relevant features, including the rise in slight injuries and the percentage increases for each injury category. However, the overview is unclear and contains inaccurate claims: fatal injuries did not remain the same, since they varied from 49 to 95 before ending at 58, and the 49 figure is for 2005–06, not 2006–07. The table also shows slight injuries rising sharply to 3,424 in 2004–05, then falling to 3,296; this is not simply a peak that “almost doubled” from the previous year. The response is 121 words, below the 150-word minimum, and several years and totals are omitted. Include a clearer overview and accurate comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to group the overview, yearly figures and percentage changes, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the second paragraph combines the overall trend with fatal-injury details, while the next shifts abruptly to 2004–05 and serious injuries. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “In 2004-2005” help signal movement, but relationships between points are not consistently clear, and the final sentence is cut off at “whi”. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by paragraphs comparing the injury categories or stages, and use clear references to distinguish annual figures from percentage increases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal injuries”, “serious injuries”, “slight injuries”, “percentage” and “increased”, which makes the topic recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts harder to understand, such as “upword”, “peojected”, “complitely”, “seocend” and “incriment”. Some combinations are also unnatural: injuries are not “held” from crime, and “the lowest with 18%” is imprecise. Aim for accurate, conventional reporting language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe figures as “recorded” and trends as “rose” or “increased”, rather than relying on repeated forms of “increasing”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “Fatal injuries … and was …” and “Slight injuries increased the most …”. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction and punctuation sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “the slight injuries displays” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “Fatal injuries … was” has the reverse mismatch. The opening overview also runs several ideas together, and “Overall,the” lacks a space after the comma. Use shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make the comparisons easier to follow.

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