Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided data below illustrates how many differen injurues (fatal, s and erious, and slight cases) from gun and knife crime have been resulted in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 and the proportion increase for each degree of injury throughout the given period.

Overall, it is immediately apparent that the overall proportion increase of slight injury is the highest figure compared to fatal, serious and total cases.

From 1998 to 2003, the fatal injury expiernced a sighnifigant upward trend from 49 cases to 80 cases, while the proportion increase was 18. Regarding serious injuries, it started from 162 cases in the period of [redacted phone] and ended with 476 in the year period of 2005 and 2006. However, there was no serious injury between [redacted phone].

Slight injuries accounted for the highest share from 653 in [redacted phone] to 3296 case in [redacted phone]. compared to fatal cases, in [redacted phone], the statistics recorded no slight case. By contrast, the proportion increase of slight injury was 405.

The total number started from 864 in [redacted phone] to 3821 case. In 2006 and 2007, only fatal injury recorded cases and was 58 case.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the table’s subject and include an overview, correctly noting that slight injuries had the largest percentage increase. You also report several relevant figures, including the fatal count of 49 in 1998–99 and the 58 recorded in 2006–07. However, the account is only partly accurate and developed: the fatal figure of 80 is for 2002–03, not the end of the period you describe, and the table shows 58 fatal cases in 2006–07 rather than only fatal injuries being recorded as a general conclusion. The claim that there were no serious or slight injuries in 2006–07 is not supported; those entries are dashes, meaning figures are not provided. Include the total’s 342% rise and describe the main trends more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs covering injury categories and totals. This helps the reader follow the broad subject. However, progression within the body is uneven, and some comparisons are difficult to interpret. For example, “From 1998 to 2003” is followed by a fatal-injury trend but does not clearly identify the exact periods, while “However, there was no serious injury between 2006-2007” interrupts the account of serious injuries and misreads the table’s missing entries. Linking phrases such as “Regarding” and “By contrast” are used, but the relationships they signal are not always clear. Group the figures by trend and use explicit time references to make the sequence more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “upward trend,” and “proportion increase,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the report less clear. “Have been resulted in” is not a natural way to describe injuries, and “the highest share” does not accurately express the largest percentage increase. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “differen,” “injurues,” “expiernced,” and “sighnifigant,” which reduce precision. Aim for standard data-reporting phrases such as “the number of injuries,” “rose to,” and “percentage increase,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “while” and the sentence “By contrast, the proportion increase of slight injury was 405.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships or meanings unclear. For example, “how many … cases … have been resulted” has an incorrect verb construction, while “The total number started from 864 … to 3821 case” uses an incorrect pattern for describing a change and has a singular/plural mismatch. Articles and prepositions are also unreliable in phrases such as “in the year period of 2005 and 2006.” Use straightforward structures accurately first—for example, “The total rose from 864 to 3,821”—then add complex clauses where you can maintain control.

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