Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Overall the table conpares the multiple type of injuries britain people experience over the periods of 1998 to 2008. All categories of damages have shown significant variations and patterns throughout the period with the rise in overall percentage of 342. This dictates the crime statistics over years. Over the years ,fatal injuries have increases by 18%, Where as
serious damages by 194% and slight cuts by 405%. Conclusively Slight damages went up so high when compared to other two types of abuses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the table’s broad subject and reports the percentage increases accurately: fatal injuries rose by 18%, serious injuries by 194%, slight injuries by 405%, and the total by 342%. It also recognises that slight injuries increased most. However, the task is addressed only minimally: there is no account of the yearly figures or their main changes, and the overview’s claim of “significant variations” is not supported with examples. The period is also misstated as 1998–2008; the table ends in 2006–07, with percentage comparisons through 2005–06 or 2006–07. The response is 82 words, below the required 150. Include a clear overview and select key figures to describe the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The ideas are presented in a broadly understandable order: the opening introduces the table, followed by percentage changes and a concluding comparison. However, the response is a single short paragraph, and the progression from the general statement to “This dictates the crime statistics over years” is unclear. Linking phrases such as “Where as” and “Conclusively” do not create clear relationships between the points, and the final sentence largely repeats the comparison already made. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing key data. Use straightforward links to show contrast or sequence, and ensure each sentence adds a distinct piece of information.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fatal,” “serious,” and “slight,” and the injury categories are generally recognisable. However, the range is limited, and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing this table. “Multiple type of injuries” and “overall percentage of 342” are imprecise, while “slight cuts” and “other two types of abuses” do not match the table’s terminology. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “conpares” and “increases.” Use precise terms such as “number of injuries,” “percentage increase,” and “slight injuries,” and vary reporting verbs with accurate options such as “rose,” “peaked,” or “declined.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, but its grammatical range is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “All categories of damages have shown” has an unsuitable plural construction, and “fatal injuries have increases” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also lacks accurate article and number agreement in “the multiple type of injuries britain people experience.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “Over the years ,fatal” and the capitalised “Where as” after a comma. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses—for example, “Slight injuries rose sharply, while fatal injuries increased only slightly.”
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