Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table describe the results of presentage of fatal, serious and slight ingeries from gun and knife crime in United Kingdom since 1998 to 2007.

overview of this table is in 2001 to 2002 fatal, 2005 to 2006 serious and 2004 to 2005 slight crimes are higher but total crimes are higher in 2004 to 2005 in given period.

Fatals are gradually increase in 1998 to 2002 and in 2002 it is 95 persentage however, after 2002 it is gradually decrease and an end of the 2006 it is 49 persentage but in 2007 again it is slightly higher than the 2006. In serious injuries are higher in 2005 to 2006 period of year and it is 476 persentage and 2006 to 2007 it is not rated.

Slight inguries are higher in 200

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several relevant peaks, including fatal injuries at 95 in 2001–02, serious injuries at 476 in 2005–06, and the highest total of 3,912 in 2004–05. However, the overview is incomplete and the response ends mid-sentence (“Slight inguries are higher in 200”), so the slight-injury trend is not reported. Some figures are also mislabelled: 95 and 49 are counts, not percentages, and fatal injuries reached 95 in 2001–02, not 2001–02 as a general peak followed by a steady decline. The table gives no serious or slight figures for 2006–07. The response is 17 words below the required minimum, which contributes to its limited coverage. Include a complete overview and report the main trends with accurate units.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of fatal and serious injuries. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is interrupted because the final paragraph stops at “Slight inguries are higher in 200”, leaving the account unfinished and the table’s largest category unexplained. Connections between ideas are also sometimes awkward, as in “however, after 2002” and “In serious injuries are higher”. Use clear topic sentences and link each category’s trend in a logical sequence. A final sentence comparing the overall rise in injuries with the smaller changes in fatal cases would help the report feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal”, “serious”, “slight”, “gradually increase” and “period”. These terms show an attempt to describe categories and trends, but the range is narrow and several word choices or spellings reduce precision. “Percentage” is repeatedly used for the figures, although the table reports numbers of injuries; “crimes” is also less accurate than “injuries” when describing these values. There are noticeable spelling errors such as “presentage”, “ingeries” and “persentage”. Build a more precise set of trend expressions, such as “the number of cases rose”, “reached a peak” and “fell”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, for example, “however, after 2002 it is gradually decrease”. This shows some effort to connect trends, but control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. The opening, “The table describe”, has subject–verb disagreement, while “Fatals are gradually increase” combines an incorrect verb form with an unclear noun construction. Articles and prepositions are also missing or awkward in phrases such as “an end of the 2006” and “In serious injuries are higher”. Most sentences remain simple, and errors sometimes make the intended time period or comparison harder to follow. Practise past-tense reporting and complete sentence patterns, then proofread agreement, articles and punctuation.

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