Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the rate of fatal, serious and minor injuries resulting from gun and knife violence in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and increase in proportion for each injury.

Overall it is clear that, fatal rate was lowest due to gun and knife crime while slight injuries msde up the largest proportion. In Great Britain, death rate, serious and minor injuries due to gun and knife crime increased over the period.

In [redacted phone], death rate was 49, serious injuries 162, minor injuries 653 and it comprised of total 864. In [redacted phone], the fatal rate was 62, number of serious injuries 200, slight injuries 933 and it made up tha total of 1195. The crime rate increased to 1382, then 1877, 2179 over the period.

In [redacted phone], the fatal rate was 77, serious injuries 411, slight injuries 3424 while total rate increased to 3912. The death rate increased to 18, serious injuries 194, slight injuries 405 and the total rate 342 over the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and give a basic overview, noting that slight injuries were the largest category and fatal injuries the smallest. You also report several early figures accurately, including the 1998–99 values and the total of 1,195 in 1999–2000. However, the response only partially summarises the data: most years are omitted, and the statement that all categories increased is not consistently supported, since fatal injuries fell from 95 to 49 and serious injuries are unavailable for 2006–07. The final figures are seriously misread: 18, 194, 405 and 342 are percentage increases, not injury counts or a total. Select the main trends and explain the percentage row accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph moves from the 2004–05 figures to the percentage increases without clearly signalling that change, and the sequence of totals (“1382, then 1877, 2179”) is presented without enough context. Repeatedly listing categories also makes the report feel like separate data points rather than a connected comparison. Use clearer grouping—for example, early-year figures followed by later trends—and link each figure to its year and category. A transition such as “By contrast, the percentage increases over the period were…” would clarify the final comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the table, including “fatal,” “serious injuries,” “slight injuries,” “proportion” and “over the period.” This is enough to communicate the general topic, but the range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Death rate” is not the same as the number of fatal injuries, while “crime rate” is too broad for the totals shown. “Minor” is understandable, but the table’s label “slight injuries” is more precise. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “msde” and “tha,” and the phrase “increase in proportion” does not clearly describe the percentage-change row. Use precise terms consistently and vary reporting verbs with options such as “rose,” “reached” and “accounted for.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce several understandable simple sentences and attempt a more complex overview with “while,” so there is some structural variety. However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors recur in articles, sentence construction and punctuation. For example, “it comprised of total 864” needs a clearer construction such as “the total was 864,” and “it made up tha total of 1195” has an unclear subject and missing article. The overview’s “it is clear that, fatal rate was lowest” has unnecessary punctuation and an article problem. The sentence “The crime rate increased to 1382, then 1877, 2179” also lacks a clear grammatical link between the figures. Practise complete, accurately punctuated comparisons and use consistent past-tense reporting forms.

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