Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table gives information about how many people were killed or injured because of Gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007, and it also shows the percentages increased for each type of injuries.

It is clearly seen that,the number of injuries went up a lot during this period, and slight injuries rised the most. Fatal injuries, on the other hand, changed only a little.

In 1998 to 1999 there were 653 slight injuries, and this number rose to 3424 in 2004 to 2005, before falling slightly to 3296 in the followinfg years. This was an increase of 405 per cent. Serious injuries followed a similar pattern, going on steadly from 162 to 476, which is a rise of 194 per cent.

In contrast, the number of fatal injuries was mush lower. It started at 49, reached a peak of 95 in 2001 to 2002, and then went down again to 58 in 2006 to 2007 , an increase of only 18 per cent. In total injuries rose by 342 per cent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern: injuries rose substantially, slight injuries increased most, and fatal injuries changed less. You also select relevant figures, including the slight-injury peak of 3,424 and the fatal-injury peak of 95. However, some reporting is inaccurate or incomplete. The 3,296 figure is for 2005–2006, not the “following years” after 2004–2005; the table gives no slight or serious figures for 2006–2007. Also, “serious injuries followed a similar pattern” is misleading because they rose overall but fluctuated, and the total’s 342% increase is mentioned without explaining the total trend. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would make the key features better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of slight/serious and fatal injuries. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and phrases such as “In contrast” help signal a comparison. However, progression is not always smooth. The final sentence, “In total injuries rose by 342 per cent,” is abrupt and does not explain the total figures or connect clearly to the preceding discussion. Some references are also unclear: “the following years” could suggest 2006–2007, although the 3,296 value belongs to 2005–2006. Use clearer time labels and group the figures in a more deliberate sequence, with the total trend integrated into the overview or a comparison paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the main trends, including “rose,” “reached a peak,” “falling slightly,” and “increase.” These choices are generally understandable, but the range is limited and some wording is imprecise or repetitive. “The percentages increased” is not a natural way to describe the table’s percentage changes; “percentage increases” would be clearer. “Went on steadily” is also an awkward collocation for describing figures, while “mush,” “followinfg,” and “steadly” contain spelling errors. Take care to distinguish “injuries” from “people” when the table reports injury counts, and use precise trend language such as “fluctuated” where a series does not rise continuously.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including the contrastive construction “Fatal injuries, on the other hand, changed only a little” and the sequence “reached a peak … and then went down again.” Most meanings remain clear. Some grammatical and punctuation errors are present, however. In the overview, “It is clearly seen that,the number” has faulty punctuation and an unnecessary comma after “that.” The phrase “In 1998 to 1999” needs a more accurate time expression, such as “From 1998 to 1999” or “In 1998–1999.” The sentence “In total injuries rose…” also needs punctuation or a linking phrase, for example “Overall, total injuries rose…”. More consistent control of sentence boundaries and time expressions would improve accuracy.

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