Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table visualize the number of crimes in UK, from 1998 to 2007, where it contain fatal, serious and slight injuries.

In the beggining the injuries of every category are low and with the passage of time each one increases.But the slight injuries are more the other two from start to end of the data.

while fatal injuries have a small hike to upward but latter on its been normal and the serious injuries are increasing time by time till 2007.

Here number of slight injuries are very rapidly changes from top to bottom in table.

This data has shown no improvements in the better enviroments of the Great Britain but that was incresing with the time.

But magically in 2007 the has data which compell you to think where no serious and slight injuries has been happened while only few fatal injuries has been done.

So that's all.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the broad subject and notes that slight injuries are the largest category, which is a relevant main feature. However, it only minimally reports the table: it gives no figures, does not compare the overall totals, and does not accurately describe several trends. Fatal injuries fluctuate rather than simply return to “normal,” while serious injuries rise overall only through 2005–06; the final year has no serious or slight figures, so it cannot support the claim that none occurred. The statement that slight injuries change “from top to bottom” is unclear, and the comment about environmental improvement is not shown by the data. Select the main trends, support them with key figures, and avoid conclusions the table cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move through the table over time, using phrases such as “In the beginning” and “with the passage of time.” The response also separates some observations into short sentences. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear overview followed by organised comparisons, and several points are difficult to connect: the claim that slight injuries change “from top to bottom” is followed by an unsupported comment about the environment. “So that's all” does not provide a useful conclusion. Group the information into an opening overview and paragraphs comparing injury categories or periods, and use clear links such as “By contrast” and “Overall” to show how each point relates to the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” and “increases,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is basic and several choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “a small hike to upward,” “its been normal,” and “changes from top to bottom.” “Magically” is informal and does not suit an objective report, while “better enviroments” introduces an unsupported idea. Spelling errors such as “beggining,” “incresing,” and “enviroments” also reduce control. Use precise reporting language and collocations—for example, “fluctuated,” “rose steadily,” and “accounted for the largest number”—and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly relies on simple statements, with a few attempts to join ideas using “while” and “but.” These attempts show some effort to vary sentence structure, but errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The given table visualize … where it contain” has subject–verb agreement errors, and “the serious injuries are increasing time by time till 2007” has an awkward tense and incomplete time expression. The final-year sentence, “the has data which compell you to think where no serious and slight injuries has been happened,” is especially difficult to interpret because of faulty clause structure and verb forms. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter, complete sentences before adding complex clauses.

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