Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table shows the number of fatal, serious slight injuries resulting from the gun knife crime in great Britain from 1998 to20277In [redacted phone] the numbers of fatal is 49 serious are 162 slight injuries 653 overall is 864 compering with others its vary lest counties of injuries
In year of degree of injuries [redacted phone] fatal injuries 62 serious are 200 slight injuries are 933 totally is 1195
the year of degree injury to [redacted phone] fatal are 72 serious is 244 slight injuries is 1066 total
is[redacted phone] fatal injuries is more compering with others its very more serious is392 slight injuries is1390 total is 1877
In [redacted phone] year of degree injuries fatal are80 serious are 416 slight injuries are 1683 total 2179
the year of degree injuries [redacted phone] fatal are 68 serious is 437 slight injuries is 1862 total is 2367
the year of degree injuries [redacted phone] fatal are77 serious is 411 slight injuries is 3296 total
3912 the year of degree injuries 2005 to 2006 fatal is 49 serious is 476 slight injuries is 3296 total is 3821 the year of degree injuries [redacted phone] fatal is 58
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
You include many figures from the table, such as the 1998–99 total of 864 and the 2004–05 total of 3,912, so some relevant data is reported. However, the response mainly lists years and values rather than summarising the main features. It gives no clear overview of the overall rise in total injuries or the much larger increase in slight injuries, and the percentage increases are left unfinished. There are also factual and labelling problems: “1918-1919” is not the first period, and 3,296 is assigned to slight injuries in both 2004–05 and 2005–06, although the former figure is 3,424. Focus on the key trends and comparisons, and check each figure against the table.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The response follows the table’s chronological order, which gives the reader a basic sequence, and most entries can be associated with a year. However, it is presented as a long series of repetitive statements rather than a clearly organised summary. Repeated openings such as “the year of degree injuries” do not show how the figures relate to one another, and there are no distinct paragraphs for an overview and supporting details. Some entries run together—for example, “total is1382 2001-2002”—and the final percentage line is incomplete. Group the data into a short overview and paragraphs comparing the main trends, using clear sentence boundaries and linking expressions to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The response uses basic terms relevant to the table, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” and “total,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several phrases are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the numbers of fatal,” “compering with others,” and “its vary lest counties of injuries.” The wording “gun knife crime” also does not express the task’s phrasing naturally. These choices make the comparisons difficult to understand and limit precision. Build a small range of accurate reporting language for describing increases, decreases, and comparisons, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Most of the response consists of short, simple statements, often using patterns such as “fatal are 72” and “serious is 244.” This allows some individual figures to be understood, but there is little variety in sentence structure and many sentences are incomplete or joined without clear punctuation. For example, “total is1382 2001-2002 fatal injuries is more” combines separate ideas, while “the numbers of fatal is 49” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles and prepositions are also often missing. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate past-tense reporting structures, such as “The total rose to…” and “Fatal injuries stood at…”.
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