Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.

In the early years [redacted phone] the number of slight injurires were the highest with fatal being the lowest 62.

In the early 2000's the number of overall injury increased and there a rise in Fatal injuries too if we compare with 90's.

Number of slight injuries also increased and its touched 3296 by 2006.

overall there has been a rise injuries overall

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject and report some relevant patterns, including that slight injuries were the most numerous and that totals generally rose. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it gives very few comparisons and omits key features such as the sharp rise in slight injuries in 2004–05, the peak in total injuries that year, and the later decline. The statement that fatal injuries were lowest at 62 in 1998–99 is inaccurate; the table gives 49. The response also contains only 65 words, so it does not meet the required 150-word minimum (21 prompt words are excluded). To develop the summary, include a clear overview and support it with accurate figures across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence from the opening identification of the table to comments about early years and later changes, so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear summary: there is no distinct overview, and the final sentence, “overall there has been a rise injuries overall,” repeats an earlier point without adding information. Connections between statements are also weak; for example, “In the early 2000’s” does not clearly link the trend to particular years or figures. Organise the response into a brief introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a paragraph comparing selected data. Use clear references and linking phrases to show how each comparison relates to the table.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic but generally relevant to the topic: terms such as “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “increased,” and “rise” allow the reader to understand the broad subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are repetitive or imprecise, especially repeated uses of “number” and “overall.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “injurires” and “its touched,” which reduce accuracy. Aim to use a wider set of precise trend language and collocations, such as “the figure for slight injuries climbed” or “the total peaked.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating the same general terms when describing different categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses a few simple sentence patterns, and the opening sentence communicates the table’s subject clearly. However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “the number of slight injurires were” has subject–verb disagreement, while “there a rise in Fatal injuries” is missing a verb. The phrase “overall there has been a rise injuries overall” lacks the necessary preposition and repeats the same idea. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “Fatal.” Practise building accurate sentences with a subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently when describing the historical data. A few correctly formed comparisons would make the trends easier to follow.

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