Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injiries caused by gun and knife crime in Great Britian between 1998 and 2007.

Overall, the total number of injuries increased significantly over the period. Slight injuries were the most common, while fatal injuries were the least common. Serious injuries also showed a considerable rise.

On the other hand, in 1998 to 1999 year/degree of injury in fatal has 49, seriou has 162 and slight has 653 or the total injuried people is 864. Whereas, in 1999 to 2000 year/degree of injuries in fatal has 62, serious has 200 and slight has933 or the total injuried people is 1195. While, in 2000 to 2001 year/degree of injury in fatal has 72%, or the serious is 244 and the slight people is 1066 or the total people injuried is 1382.

On the other hand, in 2006 to 2007 in fatal has 58 people injuried , or no seriouspeople or no slight injuried people. And the year/degree of injury is increased in 98/99-2005/06 or 06/07. Great Britian -Gun and Knife crime has been controlled.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad pattern that total injuries rose and that slight injuries were most common, which are relevant features. However, the report covers only a small part of the table: it gives detailed figures for the first three years and mentions 2006–07, but omits the substantial changes in the intervening years and the percentage increases. Some data are also misreported: 72 is the fatal-injury figure in 2000–01, not 72%, and the dashes for serious and slight injuries in 2006–07 mean figures are unavailable, not that there were no injuries. The claim that crime “has been controlled” is unsupported. Select and compare the main trends across the full period, and describe missing data accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and body paragraphs, so there is an attempt to organise the information. The overview also gives the reader a useful starting point by identifying the rise in total injuries and the relative frequency of injury types. However, the body does not develop a clear progression through the table: it lists three early years, jumps to the final year, and leaves the intervening data unexplained. Repeated openings such as “On the other hand” do not show a meaningful contrast, while “Whereas” and “While” introduce incomplete or awkwardly connected statements. Group the years into clear stages or trends, and use linking expressions only when the relationship between the figures calls for them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total number,” and “increased significantly,” which helps communicate the subject and broad trend. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “year/degree of injury” and “total injuried people.” Spelling errors, including “injiries” and “Britian,” also reduce accuracy. “Has been controlled” is not an appropriate description of the figures because the table does not show that crime was controlled. Use concise statistical language and accurate collocations, for example, “the number of people injured” and “the figures were unavailable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use longer sentences and contrast clauses, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the data difficult to follow. For example, “in fatal has 49” lacks a clear subject and verb structure, while “the total injuried people is 864” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. The clause beginning “Whereas” is not properly integrated, and the final sentence, “And the year/degree of injury is increased,” does not express the intended relationship clearly. Most statements follow a repetitive list pattern rather than showing a controlled range of sentence forms. Practise simple, accurate comparisons first, such as “Fatal injuries rose from 49 to 62,” then combine related trends using correctly formed clauses.

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