Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given chart depicts the increasing number of injuries by knife and gun in different time period in Great Britain .

We ratio of fatal disease has been fluctuating from 49 to 58 percent from 1999 to 2007.It is at its peak in 2001 about 95 percent.The ratio of serious injuries has been increased from 1999 from 162 to 476 in 2007.An increase in number of slight injuries have been observed from 1999 to 2007.

If we compare overall ratio of fatal ,serious and slight injuries from 1999 to 2007,we see an increase in all these ratios about 342 percent.A fluctuations in serious ,fatal and slight injuries have been observed during this time period.Overall percentage of slight injuries is more than fatal and serious injuries.Steps should be taken to overcome this alarming situation which has been increased with passage of time.Total percentage of gun and knife injuries have been increased to about 342 percent ,which is higher than 1999.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad pattern that injuries increased and note that slight injuries were more numerous than the other categories. However, the response reports several figures inaccurately: fatal injuries are counts, not percentages, and the 2006–07 figure is 58, while 49 is the 2005–06 figure. The claim that all categories increased by about 342% is also incorrect; the table gives increases of 18% for fatal, 194% for serious, 405% for slight injuries, and 342% for the total. The overview is limited, and important features such as the sharp rise in slight injuries in 2004–05 and the peak in serious injuries in 2005–06 are not clearly described. Focus on accurate comparisons and summarise the main trends without adding recommendations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the table, discusses injury categories, and ends with a general summary. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the ideas are not grouped into clear paragraphs, and the progression is weakened by repetition: increases and fluctuations are mentioned several times without a clear distinction between the categories or the overall total. Linking phrases such as “If we compare” and “Overall” are used, but they do not consistently clarify how the figures relate. The recommendation that “Steps should be taken” also interrupts the report’s focus on describing data. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and a paragraph comparing the figures across years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “fluctuating,” “peak,” “increase,” and “overall,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a table. “Ratio” is repeatedly used where “number” or “figure” is needed, and “fatal disease” does not describe the data. Phrases such as “increased with passage of time” and “alarming situation” are vague or evaluative rather than precise, objective reporting. Aim for accurate terms such as “the number of fatal injuries,” “rose,” “fell,” and “accounted for,” and use them to make direct comparisons between categories and years.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and attempts longer structures, for example, “If we compare overall ratio…” and “which is higher than 1999.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include “We ratio of fatal disease,” the missing article in “in different time period,” and “An increase in number … have been observed,” where the subject and verb do not agree. Tense and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “has been increased” and “It is at its peak in 2001 about 95 percent.” Punctuation spacing is irregular, and several sentences run together. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense reporting, using shorter, complete sentences before adding more complex structures.

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