Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Introduction:

The recent studies explore the information related gun and knife crimes in Britain. Majority of people hit in different ways.

Explanation:

The studies compare and contrasts the percentage of crimes in britain. 18 percent people suffers in fatal condiions. 194 people had serious condition just because they hit with gun and knife during war in britain. 405 majority of people had slighlty injuires but they could easily survive during britain war. Total percentage of hit peoples are 342 . if i mention the similaity, all peoples are hit by gun and kniefs and difference is 342 peoples had different conditions.

conclusion:

The final thought of this studuies is, in Britain war high percentage of people suffers alot but they have survival chances as well. A litle qunatity of 18 people who have fatal conditions during war they highlight the importance of war during britain war as well as the total amount of britain people who fight for their own desires.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes an attempt to discuss the table and mentions the percentage figures 18, 194, 405 and 342, but it repeatedly misinterprets them as numbers of people or percentages of people suffering. They are percentage increases, not counts of victims or proportions of all injuries. The claim that the figures relate to a “war” is unsupported, and the table gives no information about survival or people fighting for their desires. There is also no accurate summary of the main trend: total injuries rose substantially to 3,912 in 2004–05 before falling to 3,821 in 2005–06, while slight injuries were by far the most numerous. Focus on reporting the table’s actual categories, changes and comparisons rather than adding explanations not shown by the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The headings “Introduction,” “Explanation” and “conclusion” provide a basic attempt at paragraphing, and the response has a recognisable beginning and ending. However, the ideas within the explanation do not progress in a clear sequence: it moves from fatal injuries to serious injuries, slight injuries, a total, and then a supposed similarity without establishing how these points relate. Connectors such as “if i mention the similaity” and “but” do not clarify the comparisons, and repeated references to “Britain war” make the progression harder to follow. Organise the report around an overview and then grouped data comparisons, using clear links between the figures and the trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “fatal,” “serious condition” and “slightly injuries,” and attempts to distinguish injury categories. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “people hit in different ways,” “percentage of crimes,” and “total percentage of hit peoples.” The repeated use of “war” is inaccurate for the table, which concerns gun and knife crime, and “survive” introduces an unsupported idea. Spelling errors such as “condiions,” “slighlty,” “injuires” and “qunatity” also reduce clarity. Use precise table language, for example “injuries,” “annual total,” and “percentage increase.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is some control of basic sentence patterns, and the response attempts longer sentences, for example, “A litle qunatity of 18 people who have fatal conditions during war…” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or awkward, and grammatical relationships are not consistently clear. Examples include “The recent studies explore the information related gun and knife crimes,” which lacks a suitable preposition, and “18 percent people suffers,” where the noun phrase and verb do not agree. The sentence beginning “if i mention…” also has an unclear structure and punctuation. Build accurate simple sentences first, checking articles, prepositions and subject–verb agreement, then add more complex clauses where they help explain a comparison.

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