Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The above Table illustrates the percentage of increase of injuries in Great Britain over the period of 10 years from 1998 to 2007.

The Gun and knife crimes are presented in a statistical data which shows fatal , serious and slight injuries happened to people all over the country.

The rate of fatal injury took place more in the year 2002 to 2003 keeping the year 1999 and 2006 very less. While the serious injuries took place increasingly in the year 2006 and 2004. There was a decrease rate in the year 1999 and 2000. The slight injury crime was very high in the year 2005 and 2006 whereas the same crime was just very few in the 1999 and 2000. The total of all these crimes happened in the year [redacted phone].

Overall , there was a rapid increase in crime from 1998 -2007 that went from 18% for fatal injury ,194% for serious injury and 405% for slight injury and the total rate of crime rise 342% in these 10 years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s subject and report the overall increases of 18%, 194%, 405% and 342%, which are accurate and relevant. You also recognise that slight injuries and the total were highest in 2004–05, although the total peaks at 3,912 in that year, not 2005–06. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it gives few supporting figures and misstates or obscures several trends. Fatal injuries peaked in 2001–02 at 95, not 2002–03, and serious injuries reached their highest recorded figure in 2005–06, rather than 2004 and 2006 generally. Build a clearer overview around the sharp rise in slight injuries and the differing patterns for fatal and serious cases, then support it with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a series of comparisons, and a concluding overview. This gives the reader some organisation, and words such as “While,” “whereas” and “Overall” attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the middle section moves between injury categories and years without a systematic structure, and the final overview repeats figures already mentioned rather than synthesising the main pattern. Some links are also awkward or unclear, such as “keeping the year 1999 and 2006 very less.” Group the data by injury type or by overall trends, use clear time comparisons, and make each paragraph serve a distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “percentage” and “increase,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning imprecise. For example, “injuries happened to people” and “the serious injuries took place increasingly” are not natural ways to describe table data; “the number of people injured” and “serious injuries generally rose” would be clearer. “The total rate of crime” also confuses a total number with a rate. Repeated use of “very high,” “very few” and “crime” limits precision. Use vocabulary suited to numerical trends, such as “rose,” “peaked,” “declined” and “accounted for,” and distinguish injury counts from crime rates.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including contrasts introduced by “While” and “whereas,” and the main message can usually be followed. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, articles, agreement and punctuation. For example, “The Gun and knife crimes are presented in a statistical data” has an unnecessary article and an awkward noun phrase, while “The total of all these crimes happened” does not form a clear grammatical description of the figures. The sentence beginning “The rate of fatal injury took place more” is also difficult to interpret because its structure does not express a clear comparison. Practise concise patterns such as “Fatal injuries peaked at 95 in 2001–02” and check sentence boundaries, articles and commas.

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