Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table chart illustrate the information about the numeral criminal activites of fatal, serious and slight injuries which hapened with gun and knife in Great Britain from the year of 1998 to 2007.

Firstly, in 1998 fatal was at 49 percent but serious and slight was 162 and 653 percent. The total proportion was 864.

In the next year, it was increased around 15 in all the injuries as compare to last year. In 2000, fatal injury was at 72 and other two injuries were 244 and 1066. The total was 1382. Furthermore, fatal was rised 12 and serious was around 100% , slight was at 1066 in the year of 2001 with total 18777.

Nextly, the total of all the activities was 2179. From the year of 2003 to 2005, degree of crime was increased steady from 2367 to 3912 in all the injuries. In 2005, Slight decreased was in fatal, serious and sight injuries. Lastly, injuries only happened in falat. From 1998 to 2007, 18 percent rised in fatal, 194 percent in serious and 405 propotion was showed in slight.

overall, maximum injuries happend in slight as compare to other two injuries in 1998 to 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as the 1998 total of 864, the 2000–2001 total of 1,382, and the rise in slight injuries to 3,424 in 2004–2005. You also note that slight injuries were the most numerous and report the percentage increases. However, the summary is only partial and some key details are inaccurate or unclear: the figures are counts, not “percent” or “proportion”; 18,777 is not the 2001 total; and the final year has fatal injuries only, with no figures supplied for the other categories. The overview is too general to capture the main pattern across the period. Select the clearest trends and compare them accurately, especially the sharp rise in slight injuries and the overall total.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, a sequence of details, and a concluding overview. Time markers such as “Firstly,” “Nextly,” and “Lastly” show an attempt to guide the reader through the data. However, the progression is not consistently clear: years are sometimes referred to imprecisely, and the sentence beginning “Furthermore” combines several figures in a way that makes their relationship difficult to follow. The paragraph beginning “Nextly” also jumps from a total to a broad period comparison without clearly linking the details. Use paragraphs to group the overview and the main trends, and connect each figure explicitly to its year and injury category. This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total,” and “increased,” so the reader can recognise the subject of the table. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the description unclear, such as “numeral criminal activites,” “total proportion,” and “degree of crime.” Spelling errors, including “hapened,” “falat,” and “sight,” also reduce clarity. In addition, “percent” is repeatedly used for raw counts, which misrepresents the units. Build a more precise set of terms for describing table data, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer straightforward, accurate expressions over unusual phrases that do not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and some basic information remains understandable. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure how the figures relate to one another. Examples include “The given table chart illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “fatal was rised,” which has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction, as in “fatal injury was at 72 and other two injuries were 244 and 1066.” Most sentences rely on basic patterns, while longer attempts are often difficult to control. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and simple comparison structures first, then combine ideas using clauses only when their relationships are clear.

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