Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

INTRODUCTION:

This table gives information about injured people through knife and gun in great britain from 1998 to 200.

Overview

Overall, these strength of injury increase with a passage of time and slight injured people more than other statistics.

Paragraph 1

Firstly, on the time of 1998 to 1999 49 people was fatel while 162 was serios and 653 people was slight and total had 864. Similarly, next year people rise 62 fatea to 200 serious and 933 was slight and complete strength was 1195. After this in 2001 people was 72 in first statistics and 244 in second while 1066 in slight overall was 1382. Then next 2 years fatal people declined 95 to 80 and serious was 392 to 416 then slight would 1390 to 1683 and total had 1877 to 2179.

Paragraph 2

Additionally, fatal people was 68 and 437 had serious while 1862 was slight and total was 2367. next year 77 in first, 411 in second and 3424 was slight and 3912 was total. At the second last was 2006 and fatal people was 49, 476 was serious and 3296 in third and total was 3821. At the last, 58 people was fatal and never people injured through other statistics. Overall, 18% people injured in fatal while 194% people in serious and 405 % in slight total strength was 342%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures from several years and identify slight injuries as the largest category, so the response is relevant to the table. However, the overview is too general: “these strength of injury increase” does not distinguish the overall rise from the fluctuations, and slight injuries do not rise steadily, falling from 3,424 to 3,296 in the final complete year. Some figures are also misreported or unclear: the 2000–01 total is 1,382, but the year is described as “2001”; the 2003–04 serious figure is given as 437 rather than 437 is correct, though the fatal figure is omitted; and the final percentage figures are described as percentages of people rather than increases. Select the main trends accurately and explain the incomplete final-year data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, overview and two body paragraphs, and it generally follows the table chronologically. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by repetitive sequencing such as “next year,” “After this,” and “At the last,” while “Similarly” does not clearly show a comparison. Several long sentences join multiple years and categories without clear punctuation, making the figures difficult to follow. The overview is also separated from the body but does not effectively guide it. Grouping the data into meaningful trends—for example, the rise in total injuries through 2004–05 and the subsequent slight decline—would create clearer progression and reduce the year-by-year listing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “declined,” and “percentage,” which helps convey the subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear: “strength of injury,” “complete strength,” and “first statistics” are not natural ways to describe the table’s categories or totals. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “fatel,” “serios,” and “fatea.” Repeated use of “people” and “statistics” limits precision, and “slight injured people” is an awkward phrase. Use consistent terms such as “injuries,” “cases,” “fatal injuries,” and “total,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report several figures in connected sentences, but grammatical control is weak and sentence patterns are mostly simple or faulty combinations. Agreement errors occur in “49 people was” and “fatal people was,” while tense and clause construction are problematic in “slight would 1390 to 1683.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “next year 77 in first, 411 in second,” and several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. These errors frequently make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. Practise accurate past-tense reporting with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Fatal injuries rose from 49 to 62”—and use shorter, correctly punctuated sentences before attempting more complex comparisons.

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