Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table displays the amount of fatal,serious and lite injuries following from weapons crime in great Britain from 1988 to 2007 and percentage hikes for each degree of injury in given period.

Overall,it is observed that fatal injures are the accounted for smallest portion in all the years whereas,slight wounds represented a highest share in given time.In addition serious hurts experience an steady increase.

An analysis of the image reveals that in year 2001- 2002 fatal cases highest injuries 95 and least marked in [redacted phone] only 49 .And over the period of time it increased by 18% .In terms of serious traumas it is least cases in year 1998 to 1999 and cases climbed to 476 by [redacted phone] and total percentage calculated and ranked 194 percentage.

In contrast,Slight harms are very small range in for first years [redacted phone] and by year 2005 to 2006 it peaked to 3296 harm cases.This increased to 405% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant patterns, including that fatal injuries were the least numerous and that slight injuries formed the largest category. You also report the 18%, 194% and 405% increases, which match the table. However, coverage is partial: the overview does not summarise the substantial rise in the total, from 864 to 3,821 by 2005–06, and the response ends without a clear account of the overall trend. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: fatal injuries peaked at 95 in 2001–02, but the lowest figure was 49 in both 1998–99 and 2005–06; slight injuries peaked at 3,424 in 2004–05, not 3,296 in 2005–06. Select the main comparisons more carefully and explain the total trend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs discussing fatal/serious and slight injuries. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In contrast” signal the intended relationships. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several figures and comparisons are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the sentence beginning “An analysis of the image reveals” moves from the fatal peak to the lowest value and then to the percentage increase without clearly separating these points. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, as in “In contrast” where the paragraph continues the same general comparison. Group related figures and use clearer sentence boundaries and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of terms related to injury and change, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “portion,” “increase” and “peaked.” This shows an attempt to vary vocabulary rather than repeat the table labels throughout. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a statistical report, such as “percentage hikes,” “serious hurts,” “slight harms” and “fatal cases highest injuries.” There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “lite,” “injures” and “traumas,” which make some descriptions harder to interpret. Prefer precise, conventional terms such as “injuries,” “figures,” “rose” and “accounted for.” Aim for accurate collocations rather than replacing basic words with unusual synonyms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more developed sentences, including an overview beginning “Overall” and a contrast introduced with “In contrast.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation sometimes make the data difficult to understand. For example, “fatal cases highest injuries 95” lacks a clear verb and grammatical relationship, while “serious traumas it is least cases” has an incomplete structure. The phrase “serious hurts experience an steady increase” also has agreement and article problems. Commas are frequently attached to the preceding word, and some sentences run several ideas together. Build each comparison around a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement and sentence boundaries.

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