Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given chart gives information about the number from gun and knife crime in Great britain which divided into fatal , serious and slight injuries. the statistics data is between 1998 to 2007 and percentage rise for each degree of injury over the time.

overall, the number of total gradually increased over the period from 864 in [redacted phone] to 3821 in 2006- 2007, number of slight injuries reported higher every year with more than 600 except [redacted phone] and number of fatal injuries reported less every year which is between 49 to 28. degree of injury higher in slight.

As a result of gum and knife crime the statistical comparison of fatal injuries shows dramatic shift it is less in number in early years and increased up to 95 in [redacted phone] and then dropped to 49 than 58 in [redacted phone]. number of serious injuries gradually increased every year from 162 to 476 and data from [redacted phone] not mentioned for serious and slight. there is huge rise in number of slight in [redacted phone] to 3424 from 1862 of [redacted phone].

overall, Percentage increase in degree of injury is 18 for fatal, 194 for serious and higher 405 slight with total 342.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall rise in recorded incidents and note that slight injuries were the largest category, while also reporting the percentage increases. Several relevant figures support this, including the total rising from 864 to 3,821 and slight injuries reaching 3,424 in 2004–05. However, some details are inaccurate: fatal injuries ranged from 49 to 95, not 49 to 28, and the total for 2006–07 is not provided, so 3,821 belongs to 2005–06. The claim that fatal injuries were “less every year” also conflicts with the fluctuations shown. Your overview is present, but it would be clearer and more accurate if it highlighted the sharp rise in slight injuries and distinguished the final year with missing data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about injury categories and percentage changes. This gives the reader some sense of the information’s organisation. However, progression is uneven: the overview repeats the idea that slight injuries were highest, and the final paragraph begins “overall” even though it introduces a specific set of percentages. Connections between points are often mechanical or unclear, as in “As a result of gum and knife crime the statistical comparison…” A clearer sequence—overview, then yearly trends, then percentage changes—would help. Use linking phrases to show contrast and change, and avoid repeating the same overview point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “percentage increase,” and “dramatic shift,” so the reader can generally understand what is being compared. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are awkward, including “number from gun and knife crime,” “degree of injury higher in slight,” and “statistical comparison.” There are also spelling and form errors, such as “gum” for “gun” and “Great britain.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “the number of injuries caused by gun and knife crime” and “slight injuries were the most common category.” This would make the report clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed. For example, “which divided into fatal, serious and slight injuries” lacks a suitable verb, while “number of serious injuries gradually increased every year from 162 to 476” is missing an article. There are recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as well as inconsistent capitalisation and spacing around punctuation. The long sentence beginning “overall, the number of total…” combines several claims without clear grammatical control. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then connect them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas” to add variety without losing clarity.

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