Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

firstly in [redacted phone]. the fatal cases are 49 serious 162 and slightly injured are 653 the total number of combined injury fatal serious is 864 .now coming to year [redacted phone] the fatal case increased by 13 we can see difference also in number of serious cases which 38 and now became 200 also number of slightly injured expand to 933 and total cases increased in comparison to 1999 is 231. in [redacted phone]1 the number of people fatal 72 and serious in the hospital is 244 and slighly injured become 1066 and total become 1382.in [redacted phone] the cases incresed fatal 95 and serious 392 and slightly 1390 and total 1877.and futher more the data shows cases from [redacted phone] decreases to 80 and fatal are 416 slightly injured [redacted phone] the data shows fatal cases decread to 68 and injured cas s increases to 437 and slightly injured 1862 and total [redacted phone] fatal cases are 77and serious cases are 411and slightly injured are 3424 total cases are 3912 further more in [redacted phone]the death rate is decreased to 49 and serious are 476 and alightly injured are 3296 which is also decred as compare yo 2004 total cases are 3821 the datat does not shows information about serioua slightly injured and total cases appeared in 2007

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You report many figures from the table, including the starting values and the 2005–06 figures, and you note that later data are unavailable for some categories. However, the response mainly lists year-by-year numbers rather than selecting the main features or giving a clear overview. Important patterns—such as the substantial overall rise in injuries, the sharp increase in slight injuries, and the comparatively modest change in fatal cases—are not summarised. There are also factual inaccuracies: the 2002–03 figures are described as “fatal are 416,” although 416 is the serious-injury figure, and the table gives no total for 2006–07 rather than saying information is absent “in 2007” generally. A concise overview and accurate comparisons are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the table’s chronology, so the reader can generally identify which year is being discussed. Basic sequencing phrases such as “firstly,” “now coming to,” and “further more” provide some connection between details. However, the writing is presented as one long, largely unpunctuated paragraph, and the repeated year-by-year pattern does not create a clear overview or grouping of related trends. Several transitions are awkward or unclear, and the final sentence combines missing data with the year reference in a confusing way. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and grouped details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the rise in slight injuries with the smaller changes in fatal cases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the table, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slightly injured,” “increased,” and “decreased,” so the basic subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and repetitive, with “cases” and “injured” used repeatedly instead of more precise terms such as “injuries,” “figures,” or “incidents.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate: “the serious cases which 38” does not clearly express the increase, “in the hospital” is not supported by the table, and “death rate” is not an accurate label for the number of fatal injuries. Frequent spelling errors, including “slighly,” “incresed,” and “decread,” also reduce clarity. Build a more varied set of accurate reporting expressions and check spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report a sequence of figures and occasionally links clauses with “and” or “which,” but sentence structures are mostly simple or run together, with little controlled variety. Frequent errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation make relationships between figures difficult to follow; for example, “the fatal cases are 49 serious 162 and slightly injured are 653” needs clear clause structure and punctuation. There are also recurring problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “total become 1382” and “the data does not shows.” Articles and prepositions are often omitted or used awkwardly. These errors sometimes obscure meaning, particularly in the 2002–03 sentence. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.”

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