Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table illustrates the number of injuries categorised according to fatal,serious and slight injuries in Great Britain from gun and knife crimes. It keeps increasing for each degree of injury over the period of 1998 to 2007.

Overall the highest percentage of crime happened was in 2006 with 3821 whereas the least was in the intial years. Although the number of crime rates were highest in 2006, most of them were slight injuries. Followed by the rate of fatal crime where it was at its peak in 2001.

Firstly the crime rates begin with 49 fatal crimes, 162 serious crimes and 653 less injorious crimes, the total number of crime rates were below 900.Moving in the next period between 1999 and 2000 the numbers showed a singnificant increase and the total crimes climbed above 1000. As the numbers grew, the fatal crimes reached its peak with 95 in [redacted phone] with total of 1877 crimes. Whereas in the next year the digit of fatal injuries decreased to 80. Additionally the serious injuries showed a significant increase throughout the year. Moreover the total number of injuries crossed the digit of 2000.

Additionally, in the year 2003 to 2004 the fatal injuries declined till 68, serious injuries grew till 437 and showed a fall in [redacted phone] with 411. Although the numbers fluctuated in fatal and serious injuries. the total number of crimes kept increasing and reached upto 3821 in [redacted phone].Whereas in the year [redacted phone] the number of fatal injuries were limited. Folllowing there were no serious or slight injuries. The overall percentage increase from 1998 to 2007 showed a significant increase with 18 percent of fatal injuries, serious injuries increased to 194 percent, followed by was slight injuries with 405 percent and the total percentage of increase was 342 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s subject and report several relevant figures, including the fatal-injury peak of 95 in 2001–02 and the overall total of 3,821 in 2005–06. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: “It keeps increasing” overlooks fluctuations in fatal and serious injuries, and the highest total is described as the highest “percentage of crime.” The claim that there were no serious or slight injuries in 2006–07 is unsupported; the table shows dashes, not zero values. You also omit the key comparison that slight injuries were the largest category and had the greatest percentage rise. To strengthen the response, give a precise overview and distinguish the final year’s missing figures from actual zeroes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing the figures over time. Chronological sequencing helps the reader follow the data, and transitions such as “Additionally” and “Moreover” connect some points. However, progression is weakened by repeated or awkward links, including “Whereas” used to begin a sentence without a clear contrast, and the final paragraph combines yearly changes with percentage increases. Some references are unclear, as in “the numbers” and “the digit,” while the overview repeats information later rather than establishing the main patterns. Group the data by meaningful trends—overall totals, injury categories and percentage changes—and use linking phrases only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, such as “declined,” “fluctuated,” “peak” and “percentage increase,” which helps communicate the main subject. However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise: “percentage of crime” is used for a total number, “crime rates” refers to injury counts, and “less injorious crimes” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “intial,” “singnificant” and “Folllowing,” which reduce accuracy. Repetition of “numbers,” “crimes” and “injuries” limits the range. Use precise terms such as “recorded injuries,” “total cases” and “slight injuries,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “Although” and “As,” but complex structures are often incomplete or awkward. For example, “Although the numbers fluctuated in fatal and serious injuries. the total number…” incorrectly separates a dependent clause from its main clause, and “Followed by the rate of fatal crime…” is a fragment. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, such as “the number of crime rates were highest,” as well as inconsistent punctuation and missing spaces after full stops. These issues sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement, clause boundaries and punctuation.

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