Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE TABLE DEPICTS THE CATEGORIES OF VICTIMS FROM GUN AND KNIFE CRIME IN THE UK AND THE PROPORTION OF INCREASING RATE OF INJURIES IN 9 YEARS ( from 1998 to 2007).

OVERALL, CRIME RATE HAS CONSIDERABLY RISEN OVER THE PERIOD. MOREOVER, THE NUMBER OF SLIGHT INJURIES ARE FAR MORE THAN FATAL AND SERIOUS INJURIES. HOWEVER, SERIOUS INJURIES ARE SLIGHTLY MORE THAN DEATHS. ON THE OTHER HAND, FATAL INJURIES ARE LEAST.

IN BETWEEN 1998 AND 1999, THERE WERE 49 FATAL, 162 SERIOUS, AND 653 SLIGHT INJURIES WHICH MAKE UP TOTAL 864 INJURIES. FURTHERMORE, THE CRIME RATE HAS SURGED UP AND TOTAL INJURIES REACHED 1195 IN NEXT TWO YEARS AND 1877 IN FURTHER FOUR YEARS. IN BETWEEN 2002 AND 2006, THE TOTAL INJURIES INCREASED TO 3821.

AS THE INJURIES ARE INCREASING ERRATICALLY, SO THE TOTAL NUMBERS OF PERCENTAGE INCREASE ALSO RISES UP. FATAL INJURIES ARE INCREASED 18%. WHEREAS, VICTIMS OF SERIOUS INJURIES RISES 194%. LIKEWISE, PAT

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that injuries rose and correctly note that slight injuries greatly outnumbered the other categories, while fatal injuries were least numerous. You also give several accurate figures, including the 1998–99 total and the 2005–06 total. However, the summary is only partial: it does not report the major percentage increases for slight injuries (405%) and the overall total (342%), and the final sentence is cut off after “LIKEWISE, PAT…”. Some time references are unclear or inaccurate: 1,195 is the total for 1999–2000, not “the next two years,” and 1,877 is for 2001–02, not “further four years.” Develop the overview and select key changes more precisely rather than relying on vague periods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to figures and percentage changes. This gives the reader some organisation, and paragraph breaks help distinguish the main sections. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow because time periods are described imprecisely, as in “the next two years” and “further four years,” without clearly linking each total to its year. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “On the other hand” are frequent but do not always express a clear relationship between ideas. The final paragraph also ends abruptly, leaving the comparison incomplete. Group the data by meaningful trends and use linking phrases only where they clarify the comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “surged,” and “percentage increase.” These terms show an attempt to vary language beyond basic repetition. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for a statistical report: “categories of victims” does not accurately describe degrees of injury, “proportion of increasing rate” is unclear, and “crime rate” is used where the table reports numbers of injuries. “Rise up” and “increased erratically” are also awkward or unsupported descriptions of the figures. The range is sufficient to communicate the general topic, but more precise collocations and consistent use of the table’s terminology would make the account clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer clauses, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors are frequent, particularly in subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “the number of slight injuries are” should use a singular verb, while “fatal injuries are increased 18%” needs a different verb form and construction. The sentence beginning “As the injuries are increasing erratically, so…” is not well formed, and “which make up total 864 injuries” lacks an article and has unclear agreement. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then build longer sentences with controlled clauses and correct verb forms.

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