Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table demonstrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from Gun and knife crime in the Great Britain from the year 1998 to 2007 and the proportion increase for each level of injury over the period.

Overall, the table displays that slight injuries have increased significantly while the fatal injuries hoveraround showing fluctuations around it.

Out of the total injuries, slight injuries have increased from 653 in the year [redacted phone] to 3296 in [redacted phone]. The injuries almost doubled in the year 2004-05 to 3424 from 1862 in the year 2003-04.

There is also a slight increase in serious injuries but relatively low as compared to Slight inhuries. Despite being increase in Slight injuries for about 405% out of total injuries, Serious injuries have increased by 194% where as fatal injuries have just increased about 18%. Overall there is 342% increase in total injuries. Fatal injuries have reached around 95 in the year 2001-02, since then there is a decline in the Fatal injuries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that slight injuries rose substantially and fatal injuries fluctuated, and you include the reported percentage increases. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: 3,296 is for 2005–06, not 2006–07, for which the table gives no slight-injury figure. The rise to 3,424 occurred in 2004–05, but the comparison should be with 1,862 in 2003–04; describing this as “almost doubled” is broadly accurate. The overview also misses that total injuries peaked at 3,912 in 2004–05 before falling, and serious injuries generally rose to 476 in 2005–06. Select and compare these trends more precisely, and distinguish the final year with missing data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs giving figures and percentage changes. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is limited because the discussion moves between slight, serious, fatal and total injuries without a clear organising principle. For example, the percentage comparisons are followed by the fatal-injury peak, while the total trend is mentioned only briefly. Some linking is also awkward or repetitive, particularly “Overall” appearing in both the overview and later discussion, and “Despite being increase” does not clearly connect the comparison. Group the data into a clear overview and focused comparisons, and use references such as “this figure” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “fluctuations” and “percentage increase,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range and control are uneven, with several inaccurate or unnatural choices: “hoveraround showing fluctuations around it” is unclear, “proportion increase” is not the most suitable description, and “Out of the total injuries” does not express the intended comparison precisely. There are also spelling and form errors such as “inhuries,” and inconsistent capitalisation of injury categories. Aim for concise, conventional data-reporting language and check spelling. More precise terms for rises, falls and comparisons would make the account clearer without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including the contrast in “while the fatal injuries…” and the clause “since then there is a decline.” The main ideas can usually be understood, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Examples include the article and preposition pattern in “in the Great Britain,” the incomplete construction “Despite being increase,” and the awkward sentence “Fatal injuries have reached around 95… since then there is a decline,” which shifts tense. “Slight injuries have increased from 653… to 3296” also assigns a year to the latter figure that the table does not provide. Use past-tense forms consistently for the historical data, check articles and sentence construction, and punctuate sentences so each comparison is complete.

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