Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table presents information about the number of fatal, serious, and slight injuries caused by gun and knife crime in Great Britain in the period of 9 years, from 1997 to 2007.

Overall, the number of crimes occured has progressively increased over the years. [redacted phone] has recorded most number of crimes recorded in that year. On the other hand [redacted phone] has experienced least number of crimes.

To begin with, in [redacted phone] the total number of crimes commited with gun and knife were 864. In the next year [redacted phone] the vount rised to 1195, with over 300 more crimes commited from the last year. Next up, is are the [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] with 1382 and 1877 crimes occured. [redacted phone] was the first year to notice more than 2000 crimes. closely followed by [redacted phone] with 2367, and in the year [redacted phone], The Great Britain has experienced most number of crimes in a year. Surprisingly, [redacted phone] did see a slight dip in the crimes with just 3821.

In conclusion, fatal injuries has increased by 18 percent in the last 8 years, Followed by serious injuries with an increase of 194 percent from the year [redacted phone] to [redacted phone]. Slight injuries were happening more and the increase in percentage from the year [redacted phone] was 405 percent. There was a total of 342 percentage on rise of crimes in The Great Britain.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s broad pattern and include several relevant totals and percentage increases, including the low of 864 in 1998–99 and the 342% rise overall. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: you say the peak was in 2004–05, although the total of 3,912 is in 2004–05 and is indeed the highest, then describe 2005–06 as a slight dip. Earlier, though, you incorrectly associate 2,367 with 2004–05; that figure belongs to 2003–04. The opening also calls the period 1997–2007 rather than 1998–99 to 2006–07. The response focuses mainly on totals and gives little account of the injury categories, despite their substantial increases. Select the main trends accurately and distinguish crime totals from injury counts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by a chronological account and a concluding paragraph on percentage changes. This gives the reader some sense of progression, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “In the next year” help signal sequence. However, the organisation is weakened by inaccurate or confusing transitions between years: the sentence beginning “closely followed by 2004-2005” attaches the 2,367 figure to the wrong period, and the following sentence repeats 2004–05. The conclusion also shifts abruptly from totals to injury percentages. Some linking phrases are mechanical or awkward, and punctuation around sentence openings is inconsistent. Grouping the data into a clear overview and focused comparisons of totals and injury severity would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “percentage,” and “dip,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. Calling the figures “crimes” rather than injuries or recorded cases confuses what the table measures; “number of crimes occured” is also an unsuitable description of the data. Phrases such as “most number” and “were happening more” are imprecise, while “vount” and “commited” show spelling errors. Aim for precise reporting language and vary expressions for increases and totals. For example, use “the number of injuries rose” and “the highest total was recorded” rather than repeatedly referring to crimes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, tense, and punctuation, which sometimes make the data difficult to interpret. Examples include “the number of crimes occured has progressively increased,” where the verb form and agreement are faulty, and “fatal injuries has increased,” where the subject and verb do not agree. The construction “the total number … were 864” also needs singular agreement, while “Next up, is are the 2000-2001 and 2001-2002” is structurally unclear. Capitalisation and comma use are inconsistent, including after “Surprisingly” and in the final paragraph. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build longer sentences around one clear comparison at a time.

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