Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table shows the number of people injured in gun and knife crime in Great Britian between [redacted phone], divided by the severity of the injury .

Overall , injuries rose from 864 in [redacted phone]to 3821 in 2005 -2006 and increase of 342% The sharpest jumpe came between [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] when the total climbed from [redacted phone] its highest level

slightly injuries followed a similar pattern they grew from 653 to 3296 a rise of 405% peakes d at 3424 in [redacted phone]. Seroius injuries also increased from 162 to 476 (|194%), although the number dipped slightly in [redacted phone] before reaching the high following year

Fatal injuries much lower The figure reached the peaked in year [redacted phone] and then its slightly fall in [redacted phone] with 49 by the same its started by [redacted phone]it stood at 58, an increase of only 18% on 1999 - 1999. No data are available for serious slight or total injuries in [redacted phone]

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall rise in total injuries and report the sharp increase between 2003–04 and 2004–05, as well as the broad upward trends in slight and serious injuries. The overview is relevant, and several figures match the table, including the total of 3,821 in 2005–06 and the peak of 3,424 slight injuries in 2004–05. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the total peaked at 3,912 in 2004–05, not 3,821, and fatal injuries peaked at 95 in 2001–02 before falling and fluctuating. The final comparison for fatal injuries is difficult to interpret, and the percentage increase is not clearly tied to the correct period. Select the key figures more precisely and explain the fatal-injury trend clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, an overview of totals, and details about the injury categories. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the overview and category details run together in a long, poorly punctuated paragraph, so the progression is not consistently clear. Connections such as “although” and “before” are useful, but several relationships between figures are left implicit, and the final sentence about missing data feels detached. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons, and make each sentence focus on one clear comparison. Check spacing and punctuation around dates and figures so the organisation is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “severity,” “climbed,” “dipped,” and “increase,” and these help describe changes in the table. There is also an attempt to vary the language rather than repeat “rose” throughout. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “Britian,” “jumpe,” “peakes,” and “Seroius,” and some phrases are not natural, such as “slightly injuries” and “reached the peaked.” These slips sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build accuracy with common trend collocations and injury labels, and proofread spelling and word forms. For example, use “slight injuries” and “reached a peak” rather than the forms in the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more developed comparisons, for example, “Serious injuries also increased … although the number dipped slightly … before reaching the high following year.” This shows some ability to link clauses and describe change over time. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unreliable, and several clauses lack necessary grammatical elements: “Fatal injuries much lower” needs a verb, while “its slightly fall” has an incorrect verb form. Date phrases also run together, as in “1998-1999to 3821.” These errors make parts of the account difficult to read. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, consistent past-tense forms, and punctuation separating each comparison.

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