Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates different degree of cases including fatal, serious, slight and the total number occurred in gun and knife crime, along with the rise in proportion of each degree injury in Great Britain over a 9 years period between 1998 and 2007.

Overall, It can be seen that minor injuries were top of the list throughout the years,whereas the number of deaths reamained in double digits from 1998 to 2007.

In [redacted phone] the number of minor injuries were almost 10 times more than fatal and has substantial contribution to the total number of cases.Moreover the number of minor injuries had been increasing consistantly throughout the years and a dramatic increase has been from 2005 to 20087. Followed by serious injuries which showed steady increase and a slight fluctauation can be seen between 2002 and 2005.

Furthermore, The number of deaths has shown fluctuation over nine years, from [redacted phone] there were only 49 cases of fatalities but from [redacted phone] it rised to 95 cases, a noticeable point is that in [redacted phone] the number of daeth cases were same as in [redacted phone]9.In addition to, in [redacted phone] the total number was the highest. an interesting point is that there were no cases of serious and minor injurires in [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main broad pattern: slight injuries were the largest category, while fatal cases fluctuated, and you include several relevant figures. However, the summary is only partly accurate and developed. The claim that slight injuries increased consistently is contradicted by the fall from 3,424 in 2004–05 to 3,296 in 2005–06, and the statement that there were no serious or slight injuries in 2006–07 is not supported: those entries are missing, not zero. The overview also omits the substantial overall rise in total cases and the percentage increases. To make the report more complete, distinguish missing data from zero and select accurate comparisons, including the sharp rise in slight injuries and the peak total in 2004–05.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing injury categories and totals. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, progression within the body is not always clear: the final paragraph moves from fatal cases to the total and then to missing 2006–07 figures without a consistent organising focus. Some connections are also awkward or repetitive, including “In addition to” and “an interesting point.” Grouping the data more systematically—for example, slight and serious injuries together, followed by fatalities and totals—would make comparisons easier to follow. Clearer references to the relevant years would also strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “fluctuation” and “dramatic increase,” and you attempt to vary your descriptions rather than relying only on basic terms. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “minor injuries” is used where the table labels the category “slight,” while “rise in proportion” does not accurately describe the percentage increase in the table. There are also noticeable spelling errors such as “reamained,” “consistantly” and “fluctauation.” Use the table’s terminology consistently and check spelling and collocations; more precise phrases such as “the number of cases” would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “which,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, errors are frequent, and complex sentences are often not controlled accurately. Examples include “the number of minor injuries were,” where the singular subject requires a singular verb, and “it rised to 95,” which has an incorrect past-tense form. The opening sentence also has an awkward structure, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “Overall, It” and the fragment-like transition “an interesting point is that.” Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then check subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms and sentence boundaries.

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