Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Firest we see in [redacted phone] fatal amount 49 or serious 162 or slight 653 and total 864.

In [redacted phone] fatal 62 or serious 200 or slight 933 or total 234.

In [redacted phone] fatal 72 or serious 244 or slight 1066 or total 1382.

In [redacted phone] we see a fatal 95 or serious 392 or slight 1390 or 1877.

In [redacted phone] fatal 80 or serious 416 or slight 1683 or total 2179.

Or [redacted phone] fatal 68 or serious 437 or slight 1862 or total 2367.

Or [redacted phone] fatal 77 or serious 411 or slight 3424 or total 3912.

Or [redacted phone] we see fatal 49,58 or serious 476 but in 2006 or 2007 serious nothing serious case or slight 3296 but 2006 or 2007 nothing slight case or total 3851 but nothing total case in 2006 to 2007 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and reports several figures accurately, including the 1998–99 figures and the rise in slight injuries to 3,424 in 2004–05. However, it mainly lists data rather than summarising the main features: there is no clear overview of the overall increase, the dominance of slight injuries, or the different percentage rises. Some figures are misreported, notably the 1999–2000 total as 234 instead of 1,195 and the 2005–06 total as 3,851 instead of 3,821. The final-year figures are also confused, although dashes indicate that later injury and total figures are unavailable. The response is 137 words, below the 150-word minimum. Add an overview and select key comparisons rather than listing each row.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The figures are presented in roughly chronological order, so a basic sequence is apparent. However, the response is essentially a series of separate data statements, with no paragraphing or clear progression from an overview to supporting details. Repeated openings such as “In 1999-2000” and “Or 2003-2004” make the account feel like notes rather than a connected report. The repeated use of “or” does not show a meaningful relationship between the figures, and the final sentence is difficult to follow because it combines several years and missing values. Group the data into paragraphs, use clear links such as “overall” and “by contrast,” and organise comparisons around injury severity or the main changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant basic terms from the table, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” and “total,” and the reader can generally identify which categories are being reported. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and the phrasing is often unsuitable for describing statistics. “Fatal amount” is not a natural collocation, while “nothing serious case” and “nothing slight case” are unclear ways to describe unavailable data. “Firest” is also a spelling error. Use a wider range of standard reporting language, such as “the number of fatal injuries,” “rose to,” “accounted for,” and “no figures are provided,” while keeping category labels consistent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows some control of simple reporting patterns, for example, “In 2000-2001 fatal 72 or serious 244 or slight 1066 or total 1382,” where the figures and categories can be recognised. However, most entries are fragments rather than complete sentences, and the range of sentence structures is very limited. Missing verbs and articles make phrases such as “fatal 95” and “we see a fatal 95” awkward, while the final sentence has an unclear structure and punctuation. Try complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Fatal injuries numbered 95 in 2001–02.” Vary the structures to compare trends, and use punctuation to separate years and categories.

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