Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the proportion rise for each degree of injury over the period.

Overall, serious injuries was rise continously in the year of 2003 to 2004, it slightly decreased in [redacted phone], after that, in 2005 to 2006 it gradually increased. Slight and total crime in Great Britain are increasing in the year 2004 to 2005, then both are decline. Fatal is fluctuated over the period of time.

In Great Britain the lowest crime total was 864 in 1998 to 1999 and increased in the year 2004 to 2005 with 3912, but in 2005 to 2006 the number of total was fall with 3821. In [redacted phone] total is zero. Serious is also esclating in 1998 to 1999 with 162 and 2003 to 2005 with 437, in 2004 to 2005 the figure fell with 411, in 2005 to 2006 the value again grew with 476. Slight is growing with the period of 2004 to 2005, from 653 to 3424 and, then drop at 3296. Fatal is fluctuated and the peak value at 95 in 2001 to 2002.The percentage of incrased figure of fatal , serious , slight and total with 18, 194, 405, 342.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s subject and report several relevant patterns, including the overall rise to 3,912 in 2004–05, the subsequent fall to 3,821, and the peak in fatal injuries of 95 in 2001–02. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: serious injuries did not rise continuously from 2003–04, and the total for 2006–07 is not zero; those figures are unavailable. The response also says slight injuries rose from 653 to 3,424 without clearly identifying the years, and it does not explain the substantial overall increases or compare the percentage rises effectively. The final percentages are listed but not interpreted. Select the main trends accurately and distinguish missing data from zero values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph of figures. This gives the reader some organisation, and time references such as “in 2005 to 2006” help locate data. However, progression is difficult to follow because several trends are combined in long, loosely connected sentences, and the same information is repeated. For example, the overview says serious injuries increased and then decreased, while the next paragraph revisits the same sequence with figures. Linking words such as “after that” and “then” are used, but relationships between ideas are not always clear. Group the overview around the main patterns, then use separate, logically ordered comparisons for injury categories and totals.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “peak value,” “figure,” and “percentage,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary language with “increased,” “grew,” and “drop.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “proportion rise,” “total crime,” “the number of total was fall,” and “the percentage of incrased figure.” Spelling errors, including “esclating,” “incrased,” and “continously,” also reduce precision. Use standard chart-reporting phrases such as “percentage increase,” “the total number of injuries,” and “the figure fell,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response communicates several figures and time periods. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some statements difficult to follow. Examples include “serious injuries was rise,” “both are decline,” and “the number of total was fall”; these need forms such as “serious injuries rose,” “both declined,” and “the total fell.” There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “Fatal is fluctuated” and “The percentage of incrased figure of fatal, serious, slight and total with…”. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check tense consistency when describing past data.

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