Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table elucidate information about great britain gun and knife crime statistics [redacted phone] . The table compares different injuries and presents the data in numbers or percentages . Overall , it is clear that that there are noticeable difference among the injuries shown in the table , slight apear to be the highest while , fetal opposite of it . in adittion , some injuries fluctuation by increment as well as decrement whereas some cases remain stable . According to the table , the first crime injury fatal was 49 and 162 serious , 653 slight and the total injuries was 864 in 1998 - 1999 .Thr followed by the second injury in 1999 -2000 fatal 62 serious 200 slight 933 and the total injuries was 1195 . Furthermore , The remaining information, Fatal 72 serious 244 slight 1066 and the total injuries 1382 in 2000 - 2001 . It is evident that the 18% fatal 194% serious 405% slights then 342% total injuries increased in 1998 - 2007 . All the provided data suggests that there is no stabily in all the injuries .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and give a broad overview that slight injuries were the most numerous and fatal injuries the least. You also report the first three yearly totals and the percentage increases, showing some relevant selection of data. However, the response covers only a small part of the period: it omits the substantial rise in total injuries to 3,912 in 2004–05 and the subsequent fall to 3,821, as well as the peak of serious injuries at 476 in 2005–06. The claim that injuries were “stable” is not supported, and the percentage figures are presented without clarifying that they refer to the period ending in 2005–06 or 2006–07. A fuller overview and accurate comparisons across the whole table would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable opening, overview and sequence of data, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” attempt to guide the reader. However, the information does not progress clearly through the table: the account stops after the first three years, then jumps to percentage changes, leaving the later years unreported. Several sentences are difficult to follow because figures are listed without clear punctuation or linking structure, for example, “the first crime injury fatal was 49 and 162 serious, 653 slight.” The overview also combines contrasting claims about fluctuation and stability without explaining them. Organise the report into a clear overview and grouped comparisons, and use linking phrases to show how the figures change over time.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “statistics,” “injuries,” “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” and “increased,” so the reader can identify the topic and categories. There is also an attempt to describe patterns with “fluctuation” and “remain stable.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “fetal” for “fatal,” “slights” for “slight injuries,” and “no stabily.” Phrases like “the first crime injury fatal” are unnatural and make the data harder to interpret. Aim for precise, conventional expressions such as “fatal injuries,” “the number of slight injuries,” and “rose sharply,” while checking spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including an overview beginning “Overall, it is clear…” and a sentence introduced by “Furthermore.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or awkward, and errors in agreement, articles and punctuation frequently affect clarity. For example, “the total injuries was 864” has incorrect agreement, while “The remaining information, Fatal 72…” is not a complete sentence. The opening also contains repeated “that,” and inconsistent spacing around punctuation makes the writing harder to read. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The total was 864,” and use consistent punctuation when listing figures. More accurate control of basic sentence patterns is needed.

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