Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the information about several injuries in the year between 1998 to 2007 resulting from knife and gun in great britain.

As an overview, it can be noticed that in the year between [redacted phone] there is a total 3912 persons and the least one is shown in the period of 1998 from 1999.

To begin with, in the section of fatal it is the least of them all it rise on the year between [redacted phone] although had control over it in 20s. Moreover, the serious injury is the second minimum fro 1998 to 2006 it lift around 314 but between the year [redacted phone] it is not yet calculated. Slight injury is highest as compared to other section it raised in [redacted phone] about 3424 it same as the total number of injuries around 3821.

Moving towards to the rest of the information, the leat one is 18 percent it is the total of fatal . Moreover, serious section is about 194 percentage. Additionally slight and total had only left around. 38 percent the highest is slight injuries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the subject and include an overview, noting that slight injuries were the largest category and that the total was lowest at the beginning. However, the overview contains a major factual error: 3,912 is the total for 2004–2005, while 2005–2006 recorded 3,821. Several details are vague or inaccurate: fatal injuries peaked at 95 in 2001–2002, but “had control over it in 20s” does not clearly describe the subsequent figures; serious injuries rose from 162 to 476, not by “around 314” as stated. The percentage figures are also confused: slight injuries increased by 405%, while the total rose by 342%. Select the main trends and report them precisely, with a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moreover” signal some relationships between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear. The first body paragraph moves between fatal, serious and slight injuries without a clear comparison, and the second shifts to percentage increases without explaining how these relate to the yearly figures. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, including “Moving towards to the rest of the information” and repeated uses of “Moreover.” Organise the report into a paragraph on overall yearly trends and one on percentage changes, and use clear references and transitions so readers can follow each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious injury,” “slight injury,” “percentage” and “total,” so the reader can recognise the categories being described. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. For example, “had control over it” does not express a clear trend, “it lift around 314” is not an appropriate way to describe an increase, and “the leat one” appears to be a misspelling of “least.” Phrases such as “the second minimum” and “had only left around” are also difficult to interpret. Use precise reporting language such as “rose,” “peaked,” “declined” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the response is generally recognisable as a report. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical patterns frequently make individual statements difficult to understand. For example, “in the year between 1998 to 2007” uses an incorrect preposition pattern, while “there is a total 3912 persons” lacks an article and has an awkward noun construction. In “it rise on the year … although had control over it,” the verb forms and clause structure are faulty. There are also problems with articles, agreement and punctuation, as in “the total of fatal .” Practise forming complete sentences with accurate past-tense verbs and clear subjects, and proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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