Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of three different injuries from gun and knife in Great Britian between 1998 to 2007, also the percentage of crime increased with the passage of time.

Overall, the number of injuries rose with the time. Slight injuries were remained on the top till 2009. Fatal crimes were less in figures than the serious and slight injuries.

In the period 1998 to 1999, the number of slight injuries are 653, serious crimes accounted for 162 and figures of fatal injuries were 49. Slight crimes were constantly increased, its numbers reached at 3821 in [redacted phone] and became the most committed crime in overall period of time. Whereas slight injuries also climbed to 3296 respectively in the last year and ranked second in terms of crime rate. Particulary fatal injuries jumped to 95 in [redacted phone], but then dipped to 58 in the time period of [redacted phone]. Furthermore, it was the less organized crime in the decade.

The proportion of slight injuries was increased to 342% specifically. The percentage for serious and fatal injuries were rose to 194% and 18% particularly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad rise in injury figures and correctly note that slight injuries were the largest category in most years. However, the overview contains important inaccuracies: slight injuries did not reach 3,821 in 2006–07; that was the total for 2005–06, while the slight-injury figure was 3,296. You also say slight injuries remained highest “till 2009,” although the table ends in 2006–07. The overview should highlight the sharp overall increase and the much larger percentage rises in slight and serious injuries than in fatal injuries. Some details are reported, but the comparison of categories and the final-year data are unclear, so the task is only partly covered. Check each figure against its column and distinguish totals from injury types.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of details. This gives the reader a general route through the information, and words such as “Overall,” “Whereas,” and “Furthermore” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is weakened by inaccurate or unclear references, especially “its numbers reached at 3821” and “slight injuries also climbed to 3296 respectively,” which make it difficult to tell which figures belong to which category. The final paragraph lists percentage changes without linking them clearly to the trends described earlier. Organise the body by comparing categories or by describing the overall figures over time, and use precise references such as “the total” and “the number of slight injuries.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “accounted for,” and “percentage,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes obscuring the data. For example, “slight crimes” confuses injuries with crimes, “less organized crime” does not describe a degree of injury, and “ranked second in terms of crime rate” is not an appropriate comparison of the figures. “Great Britian” is also misspelled. Aim for precise, repeated terms such as “injuries,” “figures,” and “category” rather than varying them inaccurately. More accurate collocations would make the report clearer and more suitable for an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple sentences and some attempts at more complex structures, such as “Whereas…” and “but then…,” but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures hard to follow. Examples include “the number of injuries rose with the time” and “Slight injuries were remained,” where verb forms are faulty. There are also agreement and tense problems in “the number of slight injuries are 653” and “The percentage for serious and fatal injuries were rose.” The sentence beginning “Slight crimes were constantly increased” combines an unsuitable passive form with an unclear subject. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, and build longer sentences from a clear subject and verb before adding comparisons.

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