Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the table indicates the numbers of injuries caused from gun and knife crime in united kindom from 1998 to 2007.furthermore it also demontrates the percentage rise of each injury over the given span of time.
overall the number of individual got minor injuries were higher;it kept on increasing in every passing year.in contrast fatal injuries were less with a slight rise in iinitiall few years then declined with some veriation.overall percencentage rise were highest in minor injuries while lowest in fatal .
to start with,total number of individual injures from gun and knife is rised over these years.among which people got minor injuries were highest .the minor injuries rose from around 653 people to 3296 in all these years .furtherthe increase is shown to be aroubd 405 percent .serious injuries were next to slight injuries with the percentafge rise of abot 194 %.the figure were around 163 in year[redacted phone] ,which rose to around 476 in year 2006 -2007.data of slight and serios injuries of year [redacted phone]
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the broad pattern that slight injuries were the most numerous and had the largest percentage increase, while fatal injuries were least numerous and rose least. However, the account is only partly complete: it gives little information about the total figures, omits the fatal-injury data, and ends with an unfinished statement about the missing 2006–07 figures for serious and slight injuries. There is also a key factual error: 476 is the serious-injury figure for 2005–06, not 2006–07; the table provides no serious or slight figures for the final year. The overview is relevant, but the trends and comparisons need more accurate support and fuller coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall shape, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and phrases such as “overall” and “to start with” signal stages in the account. However, progression is weakened by repetition of the overview’s points in the final paragraph and by unclear links between figures. For example, “serious injuries were next to slight injuries” does not clearly explain the comparison, and the final sentence, “data of slight and serios injuries of year 2006-2007,” is incomplete. Organise the body around clear comparisons, use references that make each figure’s category and year unmistakable, and finish the report with a complete statement.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “minor injuries,” “percentage rise,” and “declined,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive: “individual got minor injuries” is awkward, “injures” is used where “injuries” is needed, and “the figure were” does not express the intended data clearly. Spelling errors such as “demontrates,” “veriation,” and “serios” also make the report less precise. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing data, such as “the number of people injured,” “rose,” “fell,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts some longer sentences, including “in contrast fatal injuries were less with a slight rise in iinitiall few years then declined,” but control is inconsistent and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include missing or misplaced articles and punctuation in “overall the number of individual got minor injuries were higher,” incorrect verb agreement in “the figure were,” and the incomplete final sentence. Sentence boundaries are also unclear, as in the opening, where two sentences run together without a space after the full stop. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them with clauses using clear punctuation and consistent past-tense verbs.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.
