Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of crime from gun and crime resulted the types of injuries in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the proportion increase for each type of injury over the period.

Overall, the crime from gun and knife resulted the slight injuries the most. The data follows an increasing trend in crime through gun and knife in Britain over the period.

In [redacted phone], the crime follows 49 fatal, 162 serious and 653 slight injuries which makes the total of 864 and in the next years, [redacted phone], the numbers grew to 62 fatal, 200 serious, 933 slight with total 1195 injuries. However, the numbers kept increasing till [redacted phone]. After that year, fatal injuries gradually declined to 58 over the period to [redacted phone], covering the overall increment of 18% . Additionally, the number of serious injury fluctuated between 416 to 476 in the timeline, 194%. In contrast, there is a dramatical growth in slight injured people from 1683 in [redacted phone] to 3296 in [redacted phone], 405%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that slight injuries were the most numerous and that the figures generally rose, and you include several accurate early totals and the reported percentage increases. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not mention the sharp rise in total injuries to 3,912 in 2004–05, followed by a fall to 3,821, or that the final-year figures are unavailable for serious and slight injuries and the total. Some details are also inaccurate or unclear: serious injuries ranged from 162 to 476, not 416 to 476, and the fatal figure fell to 49 in 2005–06 before reaching 58 in 2006–07. The account therefore selects relevant information but reports key trends only partially and needs more precise comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph of figures. The chronological sequence in the detail paragraph helps the reader follow the early years, and transitions such as “However,” “After that year,” and “In contrast” show attempts to connect information. Some links are not fully logical or clear, though. “However” does not clearly signal the continued rise to 2002–03, and “Additionally” introduces a serious-injury comparison without explaining how it relates to the preceding fatal figures. The final paragraph also combines several categories and percentages in a compressed way. Grouping the main trends by injury severity, and using clearer references to the relevant years, would make the progression more coherent and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “declined,” “fluctuated,” and “overall increment,” so the reader can identify the categories and general movement. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the number of crime,” “crime from gun and knife,” and “slight injured people.” “Dramatical growth” is also an unsuitable form and collocation for describing the increase. These noticeable problems make parts of the report less natural and occasionally obscure the intended meaning. Aim for precise chart language and consistent noun forms, for example “the number of injuries,” “injuries caused by gun and knife crime,” and “a sharp rise in slight injuries.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “After that year” and a comparison introduced by “In contrast.” However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the crime follows 49 fatal, 162 serious and 653 slight injuries” has an unclear subject and verb pattern; “the number of serious injury fluctuate” has agreement and plural errors; and “from 1683 … to 3296 …, 405%” leaves the relationship between the figures and percentage incomplete. The sentence about the overall increase also has awkward punctuation around the percentage. Practise building complete, clearly linked sentences around each comparison, while checking verb agreement and plural forms.

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