Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrate the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Overall, slight injuries were highest in number among all the injuries and the largest figure was observed in [redacted phone] for all categories except fatal injuries.

To begin with, fatal injuries were the lowest in number among all the categories with 49 in [redacted phone]. This figure showed a steady growth and reached maximum value at [redacted phone] with 95. Whereas, it depicted a fall after [redacted phone] and again reached 49 in [redacted phone] and a slight increase to 58 in [redacted phone]. Meanwhile, serious injuries showed a steady rise from 1998/99 to 2005/06 with 162 and 476 number respectively. The % increase from 98/99 to 2005/06 is 18 % for fatal injuries and 194% for serious injuries.

Furthermore, slight injuries depicted a steady growth with the double the number in 2005-6 with 3296. The percentage increase is 405 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main pattern that slight injuries were the most numerous and report several relevant figures, including the fatal-injury peak of 95 and the final fatal count of 58. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: the largest figure for all categories except fatal injuries was not in 2005–2006, since slight injuries peaked at 3,424 in 2004–2005, while serious injuries peaked at 476 in 2005–2006. The account also omits the total column and its substantial rise, and the claim that slight injuries doubled in 2005–2006 is unclear and does not accurately describe the trend. The response is 141 words, below the 150-word minimum. Develop a fuller overview and select accurate comparisons to address the task more completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing injury categories. Sequencing from fatal to serious and then slight injuries is generally understandable, and transitions such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is limited because the total figures are not discussed and the final paragraph is very brief, ending without a concluding comparison. Some linking is mechanical, and “Whereas” begins a sentence fragment rather than connecting two complete clauses. Group related trends more clearly, use transitions to show meaningful comparisons, and ensure each paragraph develops its point rather than listing figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of task vocabulary, including “fatal injuries,” “steady growth,” “maximum value,” and “percentage increase,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some repetition of “injuries,” “figure,” and “increase,” and several expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “with the double the number” and “with 162 and 476 number respectively.” “Depicted” is also used repeatedly where simpler verbs such as “rose” or “fell” would sound more natural. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, but they limit precision and fluency. Aim for accurate collocations and vary reporting verbs while keeping the language natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in the opening and a contrast in “Whereas, it depicted a fall.” However, errors in agreement and sentence construction recur. For example, “The table illustrate” should be “The table illustrates,” and “Whereas” is incorrectly used to start a dependent clause as a standalone sentence. The phrase “with the double the number” also has faulty article and sentence structure, while “with 162 and 476 number respectively” lacks a grammatically complete comparison. Punctuation and spacing around percentages are inconsistent. These errors are usually understandable, but more accurate clause construction and agreement are needed for stronger control.

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