Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrate the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and kinfe crime in Great Beitain from 1998 and 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

First of all, the year of [redacted phone] show the three types of crime statistics Fatal 49, Seriousd 162, Slight 653 and the total 864. The year [redacted phone] persent the fatal 62, serious 200, slight 933 and total 1195. [redacted phone] fatal 72, serious 244, slight 1066 and the total crime 1382. And the year [redacted phone] fatal 95, serious 392, slight 1390, total 1877. And the yera [redacted phone] fatal 80, serious 416, slight 1683 and total 2179.

secondly the year [redacted phone] fatal 68,serious 437, slight 1862 and the total 2367. [redacted phone] show the fatal 77, serious 411, slight 3424 and total 3912. And the year [redacted phone] fatal 49, serious 476, slight 3296 and total 3821. And the last year [redacted phone] show the fatal 58 and the serious and slight not show the crime. And increase the percentage 98/99 the year [redacted phone] or [redacted phone].

Overall the most high crime the yaer [redacted phone] and lowest crime the year of [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the table’s subject and report many figures accurately, including the totals for 1998–99 and 2005–06. However, the response is mainly a year-by-year list rather than a summary of the main features. The overview is limited to saying that 2005–06 had the most crime and 1998–99 the least; it misses the broad rise in totals, the sharp increase in slight injuries, and the fact that fatal injuries fluctuated. The claim that 2005–06 was the highest is also inaccurate: the total peaked at 3,912 in 2004–05, before falling to 3,821. The percentage increases are mentioned but not reported. Select key trends and comparisons, and explain them rather than listing every row.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it moves through the years in order and ends with an overall statement. This gives the reader some sense of progression, and the figures are generally grouped by period. However, the repeated pattern of “the year … fatal … serious … slight … total” makes the account mechanical, while connectors such as “First of all,” “secondly,” and repeated “And” do little to show relationships between the data. The overview also comes after the detailed list, so the main message is not established early. Organise the response into a clear introduction, overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing key trends, using linking language to highlight rises, falls, and contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic terms such as “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total,” and “percentage increase,” so the subject is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and some word choices or spellings reduce clarity, including “most high crime,” “the crime” for injury figures, and “not show the crime.” There are also spelling errors such as “kinfe,” “Beitain,” and “persent.” Aim for accurate, natural expressions for describing data, such as “the highest total,” “injuries were not reported,” “rose sharply,” and “declined slightly.” Vary verbs and nouns where appropriate, but prioritise correct spelling and collocation over using more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most information is conveyed through short, simple statements, and the chronological sequence is generally understandable. However, sentence structures are repetitive, and errors occur frequently in agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “The table illustrate” should use a singular verb, while “the year … show” also needs agreement; “the year of 1998-1999” is an awkward article/preposition pattern. Several entries are fragments joined with “And,” and the final sentence, “And increase the percentage…,” does not form a complete grammatical statement. Practise combining figures into complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use a small range of comparison structures, such as “while” and “whereas,” with careful punctuation.

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