Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the fatal when we see then the highest numbers was in 2002 and then they go to less number year by vyears and finallybin 2007 they come to their like initial step. while in serius diagram if we see their numbers are go highly year to years and finally in 2006 they go to 476 and increasing numbetr are so highly.

In slight line there ratio is too gp in highly increasing,they have increased more than 5 times as comparred to their start.

while at tje lastvstage in the total and resulting line if we conclude and finilized that the ratio of that also become more highly 4 times when we considered it at the start.so at the first it go to increasing their number but at last it will come back it to less stage and after that it will go to highly and highly numbering at considered to the past.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant broad patterns: fatal injuries peak around 2001–02 and later fall, serious injuries rise to 476 in 2005–06, and slight injuries increase substantially. However, the account is only partial and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. Fatal injuries do not simply decline year by year after their peak; they fluctuate, reaching 49 in 2005–06 before rising to 58 in 2006–07. The claim that slight injuries increased “more than 5 times” is not supported by the table: the increase from 653 to 3,296 is about fivefold. You also omit the key overall rise in total injuries from 864 to 3,821, with a dip in the final reported year. A concise overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by injury category, using phrases such as “while in serious” and “In slight line,” followed by a comment on the total. This gives the reader some sense of the topics being discussed. However, the progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated and relationships between them are not clearly expressed. The final sentence, for example, moves between an initial increase, a return to a lower level, and later increases without identifying which figures or period it describes. Paragraphing is limited, and linking expressions such as “while” and “so” do not consistently clarify comparisons. Group the trends into a clear overview and supporting details, and use explicit year-to-year references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “total,” “increasing,” and “ratio,” so the main subject can sometimes be recognised. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a table. Expressions such as “their numbers are go highly,” “too gp in highly increasing,” and “come back it to less stage” make the intended trends hard to understand. Spelling errors, including “serius,” “num betr,” and “finilized,” also reduce clarity. Use precise trend language and standard forms, such as “rose steadily,” “fluctuated,” “fell to,” and “reached a peak,” while checking spelling and avoiding vague terms like “ratio” when you mean a number or total.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “while” and “when,” but these structures are often faulty, and the response relies on a narrow range of sentence patterns. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “the highest numbers was” and “their numbers are go highly.” Other clauses lack clear grammatical structure, as in “they have increased more than 5 times as compared to their start.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, particularly in the long final sentence, which makes the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing short, complete comparisons first, with a clear subject and verb, then combine them using accurate clauses such as “Although the figure fell, it later rose again.”

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