Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

we can see very clearly that there is large increas in total number of injuries over the years. the fata injuries did not increased enormously but there was a rise in between [redacted phone] adn the highest recorded in [redacted phone] and in 2006 it was same number as in 1998-99. when we talk about serious injuries there is a significant increase over the years and in [redacted phone] the numbers were more than double of injuries in 1998-99.the highest increase seen over the years in injuries is in slight category which increased approx 5 times from [redacted phone] and the highest number recorded in [redacted phone]. the most fatal injuries were in [redacted phone] , the most serious injuries were recorded in [redacted phone] and the slight injuries were highest in [redacted phone].As described from the statistics the crime from gun and knife injuries rised exponentialy and slight injuries are increasing faster but fatal injuries qare not increasing fast which is a good thing but serious injuries are also getting higher whih is a point of concern for the crimes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: total injuries rose substantially, slight injuries increased most, and fatal injuries changed less. You also correctly identify the peak fatal figure in 2001–02 (95), the peak serious figure in 2005–06 (476), and the peak slight figure in 2004–05 (3,424). However, some comparisons are imprecise: serious injuries were almost three times their 1998–99 level by 2005–06, not merely “more than double,” and fatal injuries in 2006–07 (58) were not the same as in 1998–99 (49). The overview is present, but the response does not clearly report the total’s peak or use the percentage increases in the table. Develop these key comparisons more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response contains a recognisable sequence of points, moving from total injuries to fatal, serious and slight injuries, and it includes comparisons across categories. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the overview and supporting details are not clearly separated. Several ideas are repeated, particularly the peak figures for each injury type, and transitions such as “when we talk about” and “as described from the statistics” do not create a clear progression. Group the overview first, then organise the detailed comparisons into a separate paragraph, using clear links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile.” This would make the relationships between trends easier to follow and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “significant increase,” “highest recorded,” “fatal injuries” and “slight category,” which helps communicate the main trends. There is also some repetition of general terms such as “increase,” “injuries” and “highest,” limiting precision. Several word forms or spellings are inaccurate, including “increas,” “rised” and “exponentialy,” and “the crime from gun and knife injuries” is an unclear collocation. Choose more precise expressions for the data, such as “rose sharply,” “reached a peak” and “the number of recorded injuries.” Proofreading spelling and using natural collocations would make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “when we talk about serious injuries there is a significant increase over the years.” However, control of verb forms and sentence construction is inconsistent: “fatal injuries did not increased” should be “did not increase,” while “the crime … rised” needs a correct past-tense form and a clearer grammatical structure. Some sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, especially the final sentence, which combines several claims with “but” and “which.” Capitalisation at sentence beginnings is also inconsistent. Aim for shorter, complete sentences and check tense after auxiliaries; then use a few accurately controlled complex sentences to express comparisons.

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