Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries from the gun and knife crime in great britain from the year 1998 to 2007. Overall, the table replicates the precentage increases for each degree of injury over the period. The count of crime elevates approximately 18% in fatal occurance, 194% serious and slight injury with 405%, where the most incident happened in the year between 2004 to 2005.

In regards of fatal statistics, the crime rate is 49% on total in the year [redacted phone],which is slight increased in the year 2007 by 58%. It does not have much diffrences in the whole incident.In terms of serious occurence, it started with 162 report in the year of 1998, which drastically increased with 476 report in 2007 in great britain.This number is huge and the percentage has been increasing by the year goes up.

The last one is the slight injuries, where it stands on top of the table compare to everything where there was less incident occured in the early year, but with the other side of the page almost 3296 incident report in the end of the year 2006. There was not any other data after 2006 in the table, thats shows the crime would have stopped.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the table’s subject and mention the overall rise in injuries, including the sharp increase in slight injuries and the peak total in 2004–05. However, the overview is unclear and some key comparisons are inaccurate or incomplete. The percentage increases are assigned imprecisely: 18% applies to fatal injuries, 194% to serious injuries, 405% to slight injuries, and 342% to the total. You also describe 49 and 58 as percentages, although they are counts, and say serious injuries reached 476 in 2007; 476 is the 2005–06 figure, while 2006–07 data are unavailable. The claim that crime “would have stopped” is unsupported. Focus on accurate trends and clarify that later figures are missing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs on fatal, serious and slight injuries. Phrases such as “In regards of” and “The last one” help signal the shift between categories, so the reader can generally follow the sequence. However, the overview combines several points unclearly, and the progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to track. For example, “This number is huge and the percentage has been increasing by the year goes up” does not clearly connect the figure to the trend. The final sentence also jumps from missing data to an unsupported conclusion. Use clearer topic sentences and link each comparison directly to the relevant years and figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “percentage increases” and “incident,” which makes the topic recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. “The count of crime elevates” is not a natural way to describe the figures, and “49% on total” confuses a count with a percentage. Repetition of “incident” and “number” also limits precision. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “precentage,” “diffrences” and “occurence.” Choose precise terms such as “number of injuries,” “rose” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “which” and contrasts introduced by “but.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “which is slight increased” has an incorrect verb construction, while “by the year goes up” does not form a grammatical clause. In “there was less incident occured,” the structure and verb form are faulty. Several sentences also run together without spaces after full stops or commas. Practise building accurate comparisons in complete sentences, and check subject–verb patterns, articles and punctuation before finishing.

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