Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Overall it is evident that, gun and knife statistics where the highes in the year 2005 to 2006. Where as it is also evident that there were almost no crime injury other than fatal beteen year 2006 to 2007.

On a closer observation, it can be seen that the number of fatal injuries were the highest in year 2001 to 2002. Looking at the specific number the total number of crime started at 864in 1998 to 1999 and rose evry year until it peaked at 3,192 in 2004 to 2005.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the table’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that figures were highest around 2005–06 and that fatal injuries peaked in 2001–02. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it omits the percentage increases and gives little account of the main trends across the categories. The total is reported as peaking at 3,192, whereas the table gives 3,912 in 2004–05; the 2005–06 total is 3,821. The claim that there were almost no injuries in 2006–07 is not supported: only the fatal figure (58) is provided, while the other entries are dashes. The response is 90 words, below the 150-word minimum, which further limits coverage. Include accurate comparisons and explain the missing data rather than interpreting it as zero.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by an overview and then a closer look at figures. Phrases such as “Overall” and “On a closer observation” signal these stages, so the reader can recognise the intended structure. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph stops after one trend and does not develop comparisons across fatal, serious and slight injuries or the percentage changes. “Where as” also introduces a fragment-like, unclear connection to the preceding overview. Build a complete sequence—introduction, concise overview, then grouped comparisons—and use linking expressions to show how each point relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “peaked,” and “rose,” which helps convey the general subject and direction of change. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or phrases are inaccurate or awkward, such as “gun and knife statistics,” “crime injury,” and “almost no crime injury.” These make the intended meaning less precise, particularly when describing the 2006–07 dashes. Spelling errors such as “highes,” “beteen,” and “evry” are noticeable and reduce clarity. Use precise terms such as “injuries,” “figures,” and “recorded,” and vary reporting verbs while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, for example, “Looking at the specific number the total number of crime started…” and the overview beginning “Overall it is evident…”. However, control is inconsistent: the overview has faulty punctuation and sentence construction (“Overall it is evident that, … Where as…”), and the final sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure around “Looking at the specific number.” There are also errors in agreement and articles, as in “the number of fatal injuries were” and “in year 2001 to 2002.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate clauses with clear subjects and verbs, and check punctuation, agreement, and article use before submitting.

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