Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

recently, many people argue that the significant rais on the globalisation, such as, that use air booking travel, investment, and popular culture threough the internet , is the good thing, spically that would increse the intraction between nations. In my prespective, I do believe that the doing this things by internet could be back binificaly on the people, althogh there a few bad things may accure.

Globalisation assist the world to save a huge amount of time, money, and efort, it dosent required to do some of tasks regullary like go to travel store to make a flight booking to travel or to sell thing you dont need it, from the Internet you can do whatever you want without spend much time or efort you can sell your thing you can book your flight , train and bus ticket etc. In additiation, people can know more about the another country and the thier torisim places, popular culture without spend much time. For example, nowadays, google flight can assist you to book your flight within few time even hotel booking with less price.

On the other hand, there is a black side from globalisation, one of the major things are minimize the job opertinities. Althogh the internet save the time of consumer, some jobs like the employ who booking the air fligh for examply he lose his Job becuase most of people depnd on the internet for this thing. For instant, many companies fired any employ that can finsh his task through the internet.

In conclousion, while many people argue that the glbalisation is the good thing, becuse it was incresed the attraction between nations , I do believe that the glopalisation have a good side and black one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a relevant opinion that globalisation has benefits but also a negative side, and you discuss convenience and possible job losses. The examples of booking flights online and travel companies reducing staff help connect your points to the topic. However, the task asks you to discuss whether increased interaction between nations is a good thing, while much of your response focuses on online services and their convenience. The link to interaction between countries is only briefly mentioned, and the conclusion repeats the balanced view without clearly weighing the two sides. Develop how globalisation affects cultural exchange, trade, or relationships between nations, and explain why you consider its benefits or drawbacks more important. This would make your position and supporting ideas more fully addressed and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on benefits, a paragraph on drawbacks, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “In addition” and “On the other hand” signal the relationship between points and help the reader follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the benefits paragraph moves from saving time and effort to selling items and then to tourism without explaining how these examples support international interaction. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, and references such as “this thing” are not always precise. Organise each body paragraph around one clear main idea, then explain and illustrate it in sequence. Use more precise references and transitions so the connections between claims are clear rather than relying mainly on basic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “globalisation,” “investment,” “popular culture,” “job opportunities,” and “tourism places.” This gives you some means of expressing both advantages and disadvantages. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “rais,” “back binificaly,” and “attraction” where “interaction” is intended. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “black side” and “save a huge amount of time, money, and effort.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, “negative effects” is more natural than “black side,” while “international interaction” expresses the task’s central idea more precisely than “attraction between nations.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a concession in “although there a few bad things may occur” and a contrast introduced by “while” in the conclusion. However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “Globalisation assist the world” needs subject–verb agreement, and “it dosent required” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also contains several clauses without clear grammatical connections. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to recover. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add a subordinate clause only when you can control its structure. Check agreement, verb patterns, and punctuation during revision.

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