Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, globalisation is increasing rapidly due to the internet, air travel and international trade. Some people believe that interaction between different countries is beneficial. I agree with this view because globalisation, for education and product exchange, with trade and the other things.

Firstly, there are many several advantages, one of main reason is the internet the internet are fast in our daily lives and the people are benefits in the thing. The pople are communicate with one and the other, with can send messages and video calls in such a few seconds and the video share on to the whatsapp and some other things on the internet.Secondly, such as the air travel are increase in the society and the people are increase in the society the individuals are very easy to the air travelling. Thirdly, the trade and popular culture are increase in our society and individuals exchange to the trade. Fourthly, the globalisation are rised in our thing and the education are best in the globalisation.

Secondly there are several disadvantage, one of the main season is the internet are some people say the internet are not use in the children and some are children in mobile phone, on the internet such as, tiktok, instragram, whatsapp, youtube and google in these things are bad in the children are health issues, eyesight, week and the other thing. the air travel, trade and popular culture are increased rapidly, the individuals suffer the aeroplane the suffer are full of the sight.Lastly, the globalisation are rised for the education, and the product exchange.

In conclusion, there are several disadvantages.There are more advantages is greater. overall, it is clear that the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, and globalisation are rapidly increased in our society.All things are essential for the life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear general position—“I agree with this view”—and mention several relevant areas, including communication, air travel, trade, education, and children’s use of the internet. You also acknowledge disadvantages, so the response engages with both the positive view and a counterpoint. However, the position is not consistently explained: the opening reason is incomplete, and the conclusion says advantages are greater without showing why. Several points, such as air travel and product exchange, are named but not developed with clear reasons or examples. To strengthen the response, explain how each example demonstrates a benefit or drawback and make your overall judgement consistent throughout. The response meets the required length; eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly” help signal the order of points. However, the progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: several ideas are joined in long, unclear strings, and the repeated “Secondly” for the disadvantages makes the organisation less precise. Connections between claims are also weak, so the reader cannot always see how a point supports your opinion. Use one main idea per paragraph, then explain it and give a relevant example. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between ideas would make the overall argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “globalisation,” “international trade,” “air travel,” “education,” and “advantages” and “disadvantages.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the subject. However, wording is often repetitive or inaccurate, and some collocations make ideas hard to understand, such as “the individuals are increase in the society” and “exchange to the trade.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “pople,” “instragram,” and “week” where “weak” appears intended. Aim to use familiar words accurately before adding more ambitious vocabulary. Learning topic phrases such as “communicate across borders” and “exchange goods and services” would help express your ideas more naturally and precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response uses basic sequencing and cause-related structures. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “the internet are fast” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the people are benefits” uses an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “one of main reason” and the run-on passage beginning “The pople are communicate.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with conjunctions such as “because” and “although.” Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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