Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The world has become a global village through the development of the internet, air travel, trade, and popular culture. Most of the people think that it is a good development which has given rise to connections between countries through globalisation. In my opinion, this is a good thing as the world feels like within reach.

The popular belief behind this view is that many people now keep in touch with their loved ones across the world. They can see them, hear them, and talk to them at a low cost. This is all due to technological advancements that have connected the whole world. For example, a mother can see her child across the country and can visit them within hours of travel whenever they wish. In past, it was difficlut to reach out to closed ones across the country. It took 1 to 2 week to post the letter.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—“this is a good thing”—and give a relevant example about keeping in touch with family across distance. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it explains one benefit, but does not discuss other effects of increased interaction between nations or develop a contrasting view. The example mainly concerns communication and travel within a family, rather than globalisation’s wider impact on countries. The response contains 141 words, so it is 109 words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. This leaves too little space to explain and support your ideas. To improve, discuss at least two relevant effects, explain why they matter, and develop your opinion with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an opening paragraph gives your position, followed by a paragraph explaining one benefit and offering an example. The ideas within the second paragraph are generally related, moving from communication technology to family contact and then to travel. However, there is no developed progression across the essay because only one main point is presented, and the conclusion is absent. Some links are also unclear: “This is all due to technological advancements” refers broadly to the preceding claims, while the shift from seeing a child to visiting them is abrupt. Build separate paragraphs around distinct effects, use clear transitions to show how each supports your view, and finish by restating your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “global village,” “technological advancements,” “connected the whole world,” and “low cost.” These expressions make the central idea understandable, and there is some variation beyond very basic wording. However, the range is limited by the short response, and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural: “the world feels like within reach” and “popular belief behind this view” do not express the intended meaning smoothly. There are also spelling and word-choice problems, such as “difficlut” and “closed ones.” Aim for more precise language about international effects, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, “the world feels within reach” could be “the world feels more accessible.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You produce several understandable simple sentences and attempt a complex structure in “The popular belief behind this view is that many people now keep in touch…”. The meaning is usually clear, but grammatical control is uneven, and the range of sentence patterns is narrow. Errors include the article and phrasing in “In past,” the plural and time expression in “It took 1 to 2 week,” and the construction “the world feels like within reach.” The sentence about a mother seeing her child and visiting them also shifts between singular and plural reference. Practise accurate articles, plural forms, and sentence patterns with clauses such as “because” and “although.” Proofread each sentence for agreement and completeness.

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