Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is irrefutable that globalisation has increased in this time so rapidly because of the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture. It is beleived by many that this increasing interaction among nation is a positive thing. In my opinion, despite having some negative effect overall it is a good development.

Firstly, for this rapid globalisation in this modern era we can improve our life by the gloabal open market and economy. In other words, we can participate into gloabal market to do business and job which was not an option before this era of gloabalisation. For instance, a qualified skilled person from a under developed country had a bare minimum oppurtunaty to participate and show his skill and get paid well. Secondly, internet makes our life easy where we can easily do freelence work from our homeland and can contribute to the world economy as well as his own country.

Moreover, from air travel and popular culture, we can be aware of different culture around the globe which can change our perspective to see others life. For example, from tv shows and movies we can get a idea of culture of that country which could be completely contrast our own culture. But while watching them, we can know about the reasoning behind their cultural activity and festival that can lead us to be a more tollerant human being.

However, sometimes these cultural mixture can backfire to the natives. For example, in developed country like USA, native people have tendency to get into work in early age without getting into tertiary education and which creates void and immigrante from the third world country and replinised that, which could a clash between native and immigrants.

In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that although globalisation could bring some problems, overall is a good thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both benefits and a possible drawback, and your position is clear in the introduction and conclusion: globalisation is positive overall despite some negative effects. The points about access to international work and greater awareness of other cultures are relevant, with examples such as freelance work and learning about festivals through television. However, the discussion is unevenly developed. The economic benefit is asserted more than explained, and the final example about US workers, immigrants and a “clash” is difficult to follow and does not clearly show how globalisation causes the problem. Explain the links between each example and your argument, and develop the negative side more precisely so that all parts of the discussion are addressed with greater clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs on economic and cultural benefits, a counterpoint, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Moreover,” and “However” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and some connections between ideas are unclear. For example, the transition from early employment in the USA to immigrants filling a “void” is not sufficiently explained, so the reader has to infer the relationship. References such as “that” in “which could a clash” are also unclear. Use linking phrases to show cause and effect, and make sure each paragraph develops one central point in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global market,” “world economy,” “perspective,” and “tolerant,” and you attempt some less common expressions. However, the range is limited in places, and inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable. Examples include “gloabal open market,” “freelence work,” “cultural mixture,” and “replinised”; these errors can distract the reader and sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Some phrases, such as “a bare minimum opportunity,” do not express the idea naturally. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common word partnerships, especially for economic and cultural topics. Prefer precise, familiar expressions over ambitious wording that is not yet controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “although,” “which,” and “while,” and the main argument is generally understandable. However, complex structures are not consistently controlled, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction and verb patterns sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “interaction among nation is” has a number-agreement problem, while “a qualified skilled person from a under developed country” has article and noun-phrase errors. The sentence beginning “For example, in developed country like USA” becomes especially difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and articles.

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