Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern age of internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people belive this globalisation is really a good thing as it increased interaction between nations.

In my opinion globalisation is a force of nature like change which is a must in human evolution and its a good thing. Humans changed over the centuries and we have been updating ourselves constantly. This way we evolved to this point in time and our civilization. Though we are losing lots of cultures this way. But we cannot overlook its necessity for that.

Over the years, internet speed was increased and people can communicate with each other in real time from different corners of the world. We Bangladeshis are getting in touch with American culture and they are with ours. We are getting introduced to each other through facebook, youtube, tiktok and others. We are watching photos, videos and opinions of each other. Through these interactions we are exchanging cultures. So, difference between nations are slowly dissappearing. This way someday we can dream of the world without borders. This is already possible because virtually we have no borders. When humanity would start thinking as one then we may give up the fear of a nuclear war. This is a good thing.

On the contrary, we couldn't help but notice the negative side to it. Through this globalisation and interactions between nations we are exchanging cultures but some cultures are being sidelined as well. As a naturist, I would say this is to happen and I am okay with it but on a different perspective we are losing our diversity. Globalisation should not be a killer of diversity. We should interect with each other but shouldn't lose our own value and color. For example, due to the rise of hindi music in Bangladesh, it's own music was vanishing.

In conclusion, globalisation is a good thing in my opinion but we should be careful of preserving our diversity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of globalisation and state a clear view: it is beneficial, provided cultural diversity is protected. The examples of online contact between Bangladesh and the United States, and the influence of Hindi music in Bangladesh, make the response relevant to the question. This meets the task well, though the two sides are not developed equally. The benefits section moves from cultural exchange to a world without borders and reduced fear of nuclear war without explaining these links in detail; the claim that globalisation is “a force of nature” is also asserted rather than supported. To strengthen the response further, explain the mechanisms behind these claims and develop the cultural-loss example with a specific consequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on your position, separate discussion of benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. The contrast signalled by “On the contrary” helps readers follow the shift to disadvantages, and the conclusion returns to your central qualification. However, progression within the benefits paragraph is sometimes loose: the discussion moves from social media to disappearing national differences, then to borders and nuclear war, with some connections left implicit. “Though we are losing lots of cultures this way. But…” also creates an awkward transition between sentences. Use clearer links that show cause and effect, and make references such as “this way” more precise so the reader can identify exactly which idea they refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “globalisation,” “interaction,” “diversity,” “preserving,” and “nuclear war,” and your meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more expressive phrasing, such as “a world without borders.” However, some wording is imprecise or informal for an academic essay: “force of nature like change,” “lots of cultures,” and “killer of diversity” could be expressed more precisely. Spelling errors such as “belive,” “dissappearing,” and “interect” are noticeable, while “naturist” appears to be an unsuitable word for the intended meaning. Build a more accurate range of formal collocations and check spelling carefully; this would make your ideas sound more controlled and academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple and more complex forms, including the conditional “When humanity would start thinking as one…” and the contrastive construction “Though we are losing lots of cultures this way.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms reduce accuracy. For example, “Though we are losing lots of cultures this way. But…” is an incomplete sentence followed by an unnecessary contrast marker, and “difference between nations are” has a singular–plural mismatch. “In my opinion globalisation…” also needs punctuation after the introductory phrase. Practise joining dependent clauses to main clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, and using consistent verb forms. Greater accuracy in these areas would make your varied sentence patterns more effective.

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